for Coffee Descent11/15/2004 c1 
14cocolori
interesting. Not really sure who the poem is aimed at. You'll be pleased to hear that I don't drink coffee! I liked the image of the living ear - 'that have no beating drum'. I suppose the golden Buddha is supposed to represent 'new age' style religion and not buddhism itself. The idea that you go and buy a token like that for a couple of quid and it will help you is a bit ridiculous but Buddhism is actually based on the ideas of loving everything. If your poem isn't actually mocking buddhism as a way of life (which I hope it isn't) then you might want to add a footnote or find a way of making that clear in the poem itself. That's the only thing I'd change.
14cocoloriinteresting. Not really sure who the poem is aimed at. You'll be pleased to hear that I don't drink coffee! I liked the image of the living ear - 'that have no beating drum'. I suppose the golden Buddha is supposed to represent 'new age' style religion and not buddhism itself. The idea that you go and buy a token like that for a couple of quid and it will help you is a bit ridiculous but Buddhism is actually based on the ideas of loving everything. If your poem isn't actually mocking buddhism as a way of life (which I hope it isn't) then you might want to add a footnote or find a way of making that clear in the poem itself. That's the only thing I'd change.