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11/15/2004 c1 14cocolori
interesting. Not really sure who the poem is aimed at. You'll be pleased to hear that I don't drink coffee! I liked the image of the living ear - 'that have no beating drum'. I suppose the golden Buddha is supposed to represent 'new age' style religion and not buddhism itself. The idea that you go and buy a token like that for a couple of quid and it will help you is a bit ridiculous but Buddhism is actually based on the ideas of loving everything. If your poem isn't actually mocking buddhism as a way of life (which I hope it isn't) then you might want to add a footnote or find a way of making that clear in the poem itself. That's the only thing I'd change.
11/15/2004 c1 118origamikitty
Ooh, I liked it. Nice flow, nice metaphors, nice imagery. Kudos :)

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