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3/20/2012 c1 76The Autumn Queen
Nice. Interesting way of writing. From the second stanza it flows beautifully, but I can't help but think the last two lines don't really go with the first two...rhythmically I mean. Skimming over, it reads fine, but when I read it out loud, it reads a little gritty. It feels like they should be a little shorter, or else split. The rest of the poem works in a bit of a short transiting to long and then transiting back to short pattern. I can't help but wonder though if that little outlier was on purpose. After all, the crossroads of life were undoubtedly not made form smooth sand.
11/21/2004 c1 83Nails For Your Crucifix
That was fantastic *would be coming up with better adjectives, but it's nearly 10:30 so I do hope you forgive me*

I'm super happy that you're getting your inspiration back. It's been so long since you've written anything.

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