
8/6/2005 c1 justasquirrel
wow, my hats off, this is very well written. the detail you put in every aspect-fighting, dialogue, and emotion-is outstanding; bravo.
-Madison
wow, my hats off, this is very well written. the detail you put in every aspect-fighting, dialogue, and emotion-is outstanding; bravo.
-Madison
1/5/2005 c1
82Twilit Exaggerance
Well wrote. Helmoor dies well. Lol. Nice ending. Hectic like hell in the last paragraphs, but it is still very good.

Well wrote. Helmoor dies well. Lol. Nice ending. Hectic like hell in the last paragraphs, but it is still very good.
1/3/2005 c1
81daphnegray78
Wow. This was...just great. It really drew me in. Awesome, awesome work here!
~Daphne~

Wow. This was...just great. It really drew me in. Awesome, awesome work here!
~Daphne~
11/27/2004 c1 verus pax
Very nicely done! I like the way you turned the whole story around in such a short time, (when Faron found his father dead and then took revenge) and unknowingly took up his father's position as their leader. The only thing is that I feel that you could have described everything in more detail, giving it a bigger impact to the reader. I also suggest you reread it again as there are some minor mistakes present. I do hope you continue. Overall I really enjoyed reading it!-pax
Very nicely done! I like the way you turned the whole story around in such a short time, (when Faron found his father dead and then took revenge) and unknowingly took up his father's position as their leader. The only thing is that I feel that you could have described everything in more detail, giving it a bigger impact to the reader. I also suggest you reread it again as there are some minor mistakes present. I do hope you continue. Overall I really enjoyed reading it!-pax