for King of the Jews4/9/2005 c1 Agility
REALLY good. IT inspired me to actually pay attention in some of those classes. I like how you told what he was feeling at each part, and the poems to mach them.
REALLY good. IT inspired me to actually pay attention in some of those classes. I like how you told what he was feeling at each part, and the poems to mach them.
3/20/2005 c1 aknightsgoldenrose
This is a beautiful story. Your descriptions were very vivid. I haven't seen the movie so I can't tell you if its alike or not. I also loved the way you had poems inbetween. Great work.
This is a beautiful story. Your descriptions were very vivid. I haven't seen the movie so I can't tell you if its alike or not. I also loved the way you had poems inbetween. Great work.
12/31/2004 c1 
1JC Jaquez
that is absolutely awesome.I know this sounds a little inane, but... poor Jesus.it really does give a little more meaning to the stuff we learn by rote in those CCD classes... Jesus was a person, and he died for the world.great job! =)
1JC Jaquezthat is absolutely awesome.I know this sounds a little inane, but... poor Jesus.it really does give a little more meaning to the stuff we learn by rote in those CCD classes... Jesus was a person, and he died for the world.great job! =)
12/25/2004 c1 4aaple
that's good, i think you really captured Jesus and his mission im making my mom read this
4aaplethat's good, i think you really captured Jesus and his mission im making my mom read this
12/5/2004 c1 194Aslan Israel
I've never seen "Passion" either, but I really like this. wonderful job.
194Aslan IsraelI've never seen "Passion" either, but I really like this. wonderful job.
11/25/2004 c1 8Silver Phantom 2
What an excellent view of the crucifixion. I don't really cry when i read or see something, but this was an incredible story and i actually felt like crying. I haven't been to CCD so i don't know what they teach you but i can see part of what. But you shouldn't have to worry about it seeming like the Passion. They are both the same. But u have to c that movie!
Silver Phantom
8Silver Phantom 2What an excellent view of the crucifixion. I don't really cry when i read or see something, but this was an incredible story and i actually felt like crying. I haven't been to CCD so i don't know what they teach you but i can see part of what. But you shouldn't have to worry about it seeming like the Passion. They are both the same. But u have to c that movie!
Silver Phantom
11/24/2004 c1 33metropolis noir
I find it an interesting story, an interesting take on the Crucifixion. I do have one minor problem with it. You repeat Jesus's name almost every sentence, it makes the text seem repetitive at times.
33metropolis noirI find it an interesting story, an interesting take on the Crucifixion. I do have one minor problem with it. You repeat Jesus's name almost every sentence, it makes the text seem repetitive at times.
11/24/2004 c1 23Krystal Watters
WOW very good...it acctualy brought tears to my eyes, and few written things can do that...i like the bits of poetry i between the separate sections..they acctaly rhyme, folow a pattern..and just add something to the whole rest of the story
23Krystal WattersWOW very good...it acctualy brought tears to my eyes, and few written things can do that...i like the bits of poetry i between the separate sections..they acctaly rhyme, folow a pattern..and just add something to the whole rest of the story