for Raising Atlantis12/29/2004 c1 Sapphire Midnight
There is't any more? How evil of you! Grr! I waa read more, too, you know! Now I must search your computer for the beginning part of the next chapter. *evil smirk*
chao!
There is't any more? How evil of you! Grr! I waa read more, too, you know! Now I must search your computer for the beginning part of the next chapter. *evil smirk*
chao!
12/22/2004 c1 SqurielLord
HUZZA! MORE JADEWING WORK!Nice begining. I hope this is as good as TAD. (Did you ever get it published?)
Thank you for your time.SqurielLord
HUZZA! MORE JADEWING WORK!Nice begining. I hope this is as good as TAD. (Did you ever get it published?)
Thank you for your time.SqurielLord
12/4/2004 c1 hummer
Hm. How interesting.. ^^ I think you're doing a wonderful job so far. I can't wait until your next chapter! Update soon!
Hm. How interesting.. ^^ I think you're doing a wonderful job so far. I can't wait until your next chapter! Update soon!
12/3/2004 c1 
20Kyoku-chan
Wow, as usual for you, amazing! Not quite the same as TAD, but excelent...keep up the good work; hopefully the monkeys will cut you some slack ^.~
-Baka M.
20Kyoku-chanWow, as usual for you, amazing! Not quite the same as TAD, but excelent...keep up the good work; hopefully the monkeys will cut you some slack ^.~
-Baka M.
12/1/2004 c1 5Crimsonoaks
hehe this is really good. i really like ur use of language. it is truely awesome. im putting it on my favorites!
5Crimsonoakshehe this is really good. i really like ur use of language. it is truely awesome. im putting it on my favorites!
11/30/2004 c1 4Sing With The Elevator Music
welcome back! not two days ago i was wishing you'd either update bridged to shaddows or post something else and i was overly exstatic when i found you that one more story had been added to your list! my mom was questioning me on why i was so bouncy, and since she doesnt like me "wasting electricity to read on the PC when i could just read a normal book that doesnt cost anything (if you get it from the library of course)" i answered "nothing."
Anyway, i loved it, and for your first attempt at something ather than SCi-Fi or Fantasy it's really good. i love your characters, they all seem so real and plausible, as does the plot. please update soon, cant wait for more!
-Brownie
4Sing With The Elevator Musicwelcome back! not two days ago i was wishing you'd either update bridged to shaddows or post something else and i was overly exstatic when i found you that one more story had been added to your list! my mom was questioning me on why i was so bouncy, and since she doesnt like me "wasting electricity to read on the PC when i could just read a normal book that doesnt cost anything (if you get it from the library of course)" i answered "nothing."
Anyway, i loved it, and for your first attempt at something ather than SCi-Fi or Fantasy it's really good. i love your characters, they all seem so real and plausible, as does the plot. please update soon, cant wait for more!
-Brownie
11/30/2004 c1 7Salt and Vinegar Pringles
Mwahah, THAT was an EXCELLENT beginning to the story. I hope this goes the way it sounds; I won't make any assumptions, 'cause I don't wanna ruin the story if I'm right and I don't wanna be proven wrong especially if there's a twist. All in all, LOVELY chapter.Update soon! :D:D
7Salt and Vinegar PringlesMwahah, THAT was an EXCELLENT beginning to the story. I hope this goes the way it sounds; I won't make any assumptions, 'cause I don't wanna ruin the story if I'm right and I don't wanna be proven wrong especially if there's a twist. All in all, LOVELY chapter.Update soon! :D:D
11/29/2004 c1 25xXxKxXx
can't wait til u update this...seems really interesting
(applause for the founder of the Holy Institution of Sleep! ^^;;)
update soon!
25xXxKxXxcan't wait til u update this...seems really interesting
(applause for the founder of the Holy Institution of Sleep! ^^;;)
update soon!
11/29/2004 c1 4Taltos
Ooh, very nice. It's good to see you back in action and as sharp as ever. I hope you feel inspired. ^^
4TaltosOoh, very nice. It's good to see you back in action and as sharp as ever. I hope you feel inspired. ^^
11/29/2004 c1 precocious
dude. YAY FOR TAKING UP WRITING AGAIN! never gonna happen with me anytime soon. bloody uni apps. they kill. they really kill. plus all the crappy essays that i'm meant to be doing, and yeah, you've got a neverending cycle of death. :) haha just kidding. love the intro. yay for British accents! i love 'em. they're really funny. so is this like a normal in-this-world story? i loved TAD, by the way. it's fantastic. getting it published anytime son? he. :)
anyway, i'm looking forward to your updates even though i shouldn't even be on this site thanks to ginormous workload of mine. :( but whatever. i'll find time. w00t! seeyaround!
dude. YAY FOR TAKING UP WRITING AGAIN! never gonna happen with me anytime soon. bloody uni apps. they kill. they really kill. plus all the crappy essays that i'm meant to be doing, and yeah, you've got a neverending cycle of death. :) haha just kidding. love the intro. yay for British accents! i love 'em. they're really funny. so is this like a normal in-this-world story? i loved TAD, by the way. it's fantastic. getting it published anytime son? he. :)
anyway, i'm looking forward to your updates even though i shouldn't even be on this site thanks to ginormous workload of mine. :( but whatever. i'll find time. w00t! seeyaround!
11/29/2004 c1 2Destiny Violet
the last part is soo... mean! but i like it. *grins evilly*. write more! like.. now! i need to read more stories. *sigh*
2Destiny Violetthe last part is soo... mean! but i like it. *grins evilly*. write more! like.. now! i need to read more stories. *sigh*
11/29/2004 c1 mutteredrefuge
Well it's good to see you've started writing again! You are one of my favorite writers.
I love the new story! It's very well written and just as intriguing as your sci-fi stories.
I love the idea, also, of the swtiching POV's. You transition between them very nicely.
I'll be very excited when you update! Goodluck!
Well it's good to see you've started writing again! You are one of my favorite writers.
I love the new story! It's very well written and just as intriguing as your sci-fi stories.
I love the idea, also, of the swtiching POV's. You transition between them very nicely.
I'll be very excited when you update! Goodluck!
11/29/2004 c1 Casey C
Interesting new story idea. You've got me intrigued but it does make a certain amount of sense that he doesn't remember her...but the line about his suspicions got me, is he just pretending?
I liked how you first gave the background from Corel's prospective, switched to both of them to draw the reader further in before finally going to Corel's 1st person POV. The background on Corel was very interesting...can't wait to see more on that. Chase is rather amusing.
Good work and I too am waiting expectantly but patiently for the next chapter!
Interesting new story idea. You've got me intrigued but it does make a certain amount of sense that he doesn't remember her...but the line about his suspicions got me, is he just pretending?
I liked how you first gave the background from Corel's prospective, switched to both of them to draw the reader further in before finally going to Corel's 1st person POV. The background on Corel was very interesting...can't wait to see more on that. Chase is rather amusing.
Good work and I too am waiting expectantly but patiently for the next chapter!
11/28/2004 c1 bagira
This is shaping up quite nicely. I'm adding it to my favourites list. It's good to hear from you again! I like the idea of the story, and the title and summary hooked me so completely I had to read it right away. As much as I like your sci-fi, it's good to see something new from you that isn't. I did notice a few things that didn't look right though:
1.)You switched from the omniscient POV (which I thought was very nicely done, and was probably my favourite part of the chapter right after her description of their adventures in the forest) directly to Corel's POV without any warning or separation from the rest. I admit it threw me for a second.
2.)You put this same line twice: "I noted. For several years, I’d made it a habit to pick up the little details that gave people away." The first time, you put "I noted" in italics, which doesn't really make sense if the italicized parts are her thoughts.
Also, I'd like to know more about Ren and Chase. I felt they weren't exactly given the best of introductions... it was a little vague. However, I have yet to see what the rest of the story holds, so until I do, I'll reserve judgement. Sheesh, that sounded snooty...
All in all, it was well done and has me excited about what's to come. I eagerly - but patiently :) - await the next chapter. Thanks for the great read. I love it already!
*By the way, are you having any luck with your Dynasty trilogy? I hope so. I'll be excited to see it all come together and be published.
This is shaping up quite nicely. I'm adding it to my favourites list. It's good to hear from you again! I like the idea of the story, and the title and summary hooked me so completely I had to read it right away. As much as I like your sci-fi, it's good to see something new from you that isn't. I did notice a few things that didn't look right though:
1.)You switched from the omniscient POV (which I thought was very nicely done, and was probably my favourite part of the chapter right after her description of their adventures in the forest) directly to Corel's POV without any warning or separation from the rest. I admit it threw me for a second.
2.)You put this same line twice: "I noted. For several years, I’d made it a habit to pick up the little details that gave people away." The first time, you put "I noted" in italics, which doesn't really make sense if the italicized parts are her thoughts.
Also, I'd like to know more about Ren and Chase. I felt they weren't exactly given the best of introductions... it was a little vague. However, I have yet to see what the rest of the story holds, so until I do, I'll reserve judgement. Sheesh, that sounded snooty...
All in all, it was well done and has me excited about what's to come. I eagerly - but patiently :) - await the next chapter. Thanks for the great read. I love it already!
*By the way, are you having any luck with your Dynasty trilogy? I hope so. I'll be excited to see it all come together and be published.