for The Gates of Raidael6/22/2005 c2 
9The Ordained
Ah, great chapter. Im an actor myslef lol.Anyways, i like the character if Fliss alot, well done. I pictured him as younger before we discover the age, but other than that, you described him very very well. And Jash reminds me of a mob boss lol."he saw his opportunity to make society crumble between his fingers." Dont like the sound of that lol. Im getting into this lol. Well done, very well written.
9The OrdainedAh, great chapter. Im an actor myslef lol.Anyways, i like the character if Fliss alot, well done. I pictured him as younger before we discover the age, but other than that, you described him very very well. And Jash reminds me of a mob boss lol."he saw his opportunity to make society crumble between his fingers." Dont like the sound of that lol. Im getting into this lol. Well done, very well written.
6/22/2005 c1 The Ordained
Hey, i like this!The first line has great imagery, very nicely written. The character of Darvae is nicely developed, im still a little uncertain of the Kings character, but i think ill find more out in the next chap. Nicely written. ;)
Hey, i like this!The first line has great imagery, very nicely written. The character of Darvae is nicely developed, im still a little uncertain of the Kings character, but i think ill find more out in the next chap. Nicely written. ;)
11/30/2004 c1 slimkitty
I'm interested. You're a really talented writer. The descriptions are great. I'd like to see where this story goes.
I'm interested. You're a really talented writer. The descriptions are great. I'd like to see where this story goes.