for Requiem for a Dream6/27/2011 c1 
5Marjulie
Up until the death part, I could relate to the character. Can't believe you wrote this at such a young age. Props to you my friend.
5MarjulieUp until the death part, I could relate to the character. Can't believe you wrote this at such a young age. Props to you my friend.
10/4/2007 c1 33Seraphis
Glad you've said you're working toward expanding this into a novel. While you have a fantastic style, with good background information (I'm assuming you were a Philippine expat for some time), you just can't tell such a big story in so few words. I look forward to hearing more about your novelisation.
33SeraphisGlad you've said you're working toward expanding this into a novel. While you have a fantastic style, with good background information (I'm assuming you were a Philippine expat for some time), you just can't tell such a big story in so few words. I look forward to hearing more about your novelisation.
6/10/2006 c1 12Kurt Wagner
Although you claim your work is amateur, its quite clear to me that someday, with skills such as these, you will go far.
I wish I had experienced a love such as this one.
P.S Thank you dearly for reviewing my work. 'Tis much appreciated.
12Kurt WagnerAlthough you claim your work is amateur, its quite clear to me that someday, with skills such as these, you will go far.
I wish I had experienced a love such as this one.
P.S Thank you dearly for reviewing my work. 'Tis much appreciated.
6/7/2006 c1 20Kaye90
i loved it! brought tears to my eyes. beautiful, beautiful. the imagery flows so well with the ideas, and the entire piece, though slightly confusing at some points, as a whole flows together and the only word i can think of to describe it is "beautiful"i cant wait to read the novel. i have to go now, but i will return to your site later and continue reading.
20Kaye90i loved it! brought tears to my eyes. beautiful, beautiful. the imagery flows so well with the ideas, and the entire piece, though slightly confusing at some points, as a whole flows together and the only word i can think of to describe it is "beautiful"i cant wait to read the novel. i have to go now, but i will return to your site later and continue reading.
6/7/2006 c1 83White is a Sin
Amazing but sad. Again i like your style of writing and hope to read more. Just in bigger font please it's a little hard to read I FEEL SO OLD! ^_^
83White is a SinAmazing but sad. Again i like your style of writing and hope to read more. Just in bigger font please it's a little hard to read I FEEL SO OLD! ^_^
6/3/2006 c1 82Isabella22
Wow...this was just...wow. Incredible.
As soon as you said that Julian was dead, I must say I just kinda...stopped.
Thanks for the reviews. I'm so glad you like them. I noticed you started writing at 11. That's so cool, since I'm 11 right now and I started writing last year around October. Hehehe, and my motivation was Harry Potter & Lord of the Rings. Again, thanks for reviewing!
-Isabella22
82Isabella22Wow...this was just...wow. Incredible.
As soon as you said that Julian was dead, I must say I just kinda...stopped.
Thanks for the reviews. I'm so glad you like them. I noticed you started writing at 11. That's so cool, since I'm 11 right now and I started writing last year around October. Hehehe, and my motivation was Harry Potter & Lord of the Rings. Again, thanks for reviewing!
-Isabella22
2/27/2006 c1 99cygnus olor
so sad... but i can relate mostly with what clara underwent. it needs some polishing but the story is beautiful.
how come you have made this story while you're a guy? *scratches head* that's a feat, i tell you :D
if you need help with your problem being a guy and telling a story of a girl, i'm a girl who went through almost the same phase as clara's :)[just check out my email if you want to ;) ]
keep it up! and thanks for the reviews!
* ner *
99cygnus olorso sad... but i can relate mostly with what clara underwent. it needs some polishing but the story is beautiful.
how come you have made this story while you're a guy? *scratches head* that's a feat, i tell you :D
if you need help with your problem being a guy and telling a story of a girl, i'm a girl who went through almost the same phase as clara's :)[just check out my email if you want to ;) ]
keep it up! and thanks for the reviews!
* ner *
7/17/2005 c1 58Sage Valkisco
Oh my god this was amazing, I'm not into the sappy love stuff, but just the way this was written I had to finish it. It seemed certain details were emphasized, which gave great imagery. From reading your bio, this story seems to me to hold some personal emotions possible. To have written this in 8th grade is amazing. Nicely Titled as well. If you have AOL (AIM) IM me, Immoral Bukowski. Thank you for the reviews.
58Sage ValkiscoOh my god this was amazing, I'm not into the sappy love stuff, but just the way this was written I had to finish it. It seemed certain details were emphasized, which gave great imagery. From reading your bio, this story seems to me to hold some personal emotions possible. To have written this in 8th grade is amazing. Nicely Titled as well. If you have AOL (AIM) IM me, Immoral Bukowski. Thank you for the reviews.
4/21/2005 c1 9Luna Yukisama
Thank you for your commenton my poem.. do you think it was really good? oh well,.. I'll do what I must be doing here... The story is really nice.. no.. scratch that.. it's really great.. awesome.. what else? deep? emotional? well appreciated... ^-^ good job!
9Luna YukisamaThank you for your commenton my poem.. do you think it was really good? oh well,.. I'll do what I must be doing here... The story is really nice.. no.. scratch that.. it's really great.. awesome.. what else? deep? emotional? well appreciated... ^-^ good job!
4/19/2005 c1 9Ina-Shiri
wow, that was good! i can totally relate to that story, except for the sudden death part... that was so tragic! well anywho, thank u for reviewing my poem :) keep writing, you're good at it!
9Ina-Shiriwow, that was good! i can totally relate to that story, except for the sudden death part... that was so tragic! well anywho, thank u for reviewing my poem :) keep writing, you're good at it!
1/27/2005 c1 12Learah Kaelar
I like this story a lot. Woot! As with all writing, there are a few improvements that could be made(mostly nitpicky things, though): You sometimes repeat the same word in another sentence for something else, like in the 2nd paragraph, the word 'suddenly' is used twice, generally not a problem though. Sometimes the chronology of the story seems a bit confusing, but that may just be me...(I'm a little slow on the uptake sometimes.) Mostly just happened in the middle. But enough of the bad. I just want to say, this is one of the most amazing things I've read in a VERY long time. Actually, despite the fact that your a guy, you did really well, ya know, with the girly bits. That's really great, I know I could never do that for a guy. Very good for something written in the 8th grade, I wasn't this good then. Anyway, Keep writing and Blessed Be. Love, Learah
12Learah KaelarI like this story a lot. Woot! As with all writing, there are a few improvements that could be made(mostly nitpicky things, though): You sometimes repeat the same word in another sentence for something else, like in the 2nd paragraph, the word 'suddenly' is used twice, generally not a problem though. Sometimes the chronology of the story seems a bit confusing, but that may just be me...(I'm a little slow on the uptake sometimes.) Mostly just happened in the middle. But enough of the bad. I just want to say, this is one of the most amazing things I've read in a VERY long time. Actually, despite the fact that your a guy, you did really well, ya know, with the girly bits. That's really great, I know I could never do that for a guy. Very good for something written in the 8th grade, I wasn't this good then. Anyway, Keep writing and Blessed Be. Love, Learah
1/2/2005 c1 12SkyeWolf25
I enjoyed this. So, do you intend to keep this as a short story or continue on with it as something longer? I liked it as a short story, but it just strikes me as a proloque for something longer. Still very nice, I was captivated to say the least.
12SkyeWolf25I enjoyed this. So, do you intend to keep this as a short story or continue on with it as something longer? I liked it as a short story, but it just strikes me as a proloque for something longer. Still very nice, I was captivated to say the least.
12/21/2004 c1 24Sarah-Brighteyes
Beautiful...sad...captivating short story. I really enjoyed it. The power of love in one beautiful tale. Great write.
24Sarah-BrighteyesBeautiful...sad...captivating short story. I really enjoyed it. The power of love in one beautiful tale. Great write.
12/21/2004 c1 43Toph Gonzalez
First of all, are you aware that there's a film with the very same title starring Jake Gyllenhal and Jennifer Connelly? The story's quite different though; the film is about drug addiction (if you haven't seen it, see it). Secondly, you are right about it being too melodramatic and sappy, not that it's bad since it is a love story after all. I love how you write though, it's quite mature enough unlike mine. And by the way, coincidentally, I just started a story early this morning with the exact similar theme, the title is "An Eternal Requiem" and the setting is at a wake. A man lost his wife and out of his grieving, he would realize something much more transcendental...
43Toph GonzalezFirst of all, are you aware that there's a film with the very same title starring Jake Gyllenhal and Jennifer Connelly? The story's quite different though; the film is about drug addiction (if you haven't seen it, see it). Secondly, you are right about it being too melodramatic and sappy, not that it's bad since it is a love story after all. I love how you write though, it's quite mature enough unlike mine. And by the way, coincidentally, I just started a story early this morning with the exact similar theme, the title is "An Eternal Requiem" and the setting is at a wake. A man lost his wife and out of his grieving, he would realize something much more transcendental...