for Into Insanity1/11/2005 c1 
7Lightness
hmm. thats pretty creepy stuff. the last bit in the last paragraph made me think of the story 'yellow wallpaper.' that was a freaky story too. anyway. the imagery is outstanding. i like how you described not only the sights, but the sounds and the feel of things. and i like how you described the wind and compared it to a serpent.i cant think of anything you could improve, really. except that this sentence kinda sounded awkward: "Sleep is of no use in this land and rest impossible." -maybe add a semicolon after 'land' and add 'is' after 'rest.' but im just being picky...anyway. great job on this piece. happy writings. bye now.
7Lightnesshmm. thats pretty creepy stuff. the last bit in the last paragraph made me think of the story 'yellow wallpaper.' that was a freaky story too. anyway. the imagery is outstanding. i like how you described not only the sights, but the sounds and the feel of things. and i like how you described the wind and compared it to a serpent.i cant think of anything you could improve, really. except that this sentence kinda sounded awkward: "Sleep is of no use in this land and rest impossible." -maybe add a semicolon after 'land' and add 'is' after 'rest.' but im just being picky...anyway. great job on this piece. happy writings. bye now.