
1/17/2005 c1
10artgirl101
aww that's a really good story i liked that. there was one problem and it confused me. i think you accidently put another name in for his daughter. at one moment she's anna and then the next she's laura. anyways its still good. and i'm sorry i hadn't reviewed in a long time. i actually got some new stories up if you would like to check them out.

aww that's a really good story i liked that. there was one problem and it confused me. i think you accidently put another name in for his daughter. at one moment she's anna and then the next she's laura. anyways its still good. and i'm sorry i hadn't reviewed in a long time. i actually got some new stories up if you would like to check them out.
12/20/2004 c1
1JD Kennedy
Briliant. The scene is briliantly set; the use of colours really gives this soul and the metaphor here and there gives it that extra little kick. Constructive critiscm? Well, some parts seem rushed, only a few minor sentences that's all, otherwise perfect. I was wondering if that book that you got published in was released over in the UK so I can get a hold of one, and oh yeah my e-mail is broken that's why I haven't been in touch.~ JD

Briliant. The scene is briliantly set; the use of colours really gives this soul and the metaphor here and there gives it that extra little kick. Constructive critiscm? Well, some parts seem rushed, only a few minor sentences that's all, otherwise perfect. I was wondering if that book that you got published in was released over in the UK so I can get a hold of one, and oh yeah my e-mail is broken that's why I haven't been in touch.~ JD