
9/14/2006 c1
16Noir Fleurir
nice going on this one i havent read ur stuff in awhile but u didnt lose any skill from what i can see

nice going on this one i havent read ur stuff in awhile but u didnt lose any skill from what i can see
12/25/2005 c1
130Kavita Najim
wow, that was awsome! I love the wording.
Thanks for reveiwing my Poem. The last line may be akward, but saddly it's true.. Peace, Jessi

wow, that was awsome! I love the wording.
Thanks for reveiwing my Poem. The last line may be akward, but saddly it's true.. Peace, Jessi
12/16/2005 c1
11les petits bateaux
The rhymes were fantastic and the vivid imagery was truly colourful. Gorgeous, really gorgeous.

The rhymes were fantastic and the vivid imagery was truly colourful. Gorgeous, really gorgeous.
8/30/2005 c1 thorn's girl
Beautiful Imagery! I love the efefect ti has on the reader. Excellent.
Beautiful Imagery! I love the efefect ti has on the reader. Excellent.
8/15/2005 c1
32LemonFlats
Ohh, this piece is gorgeous.
Nice rhyming job, and although I think you could have tried to keep a consistent number of syllables in each line, your style works here.
I really, really like your imagery. So beautiful, however corny that may sound. "Frozen for eternity" at the end just gives me the shivers. =)
Leaves the reader with a sad smile- oh, how I dread winter now.
This is fantabulous! You should enter it in a contest or something. I really enjoyed it =)

Ohh, this piece is gorgeous.
Nice rhyming job, and although I think you could have tried to keep a consistent number of syllables in each line, your style works here.
I really, really like your imagery. So beautiful, however corny that may sound. "Frozen for eternity" at the end just gives me the shivers. =)
Leaves the reader with a sad smile- oh, how I dread winter now.
This is fantabulous! You should enter it in a contest or something. I really enjoyed it =)
8/8/2005 c1
1Utopia Story Group
I really like the visual imagery found in this poem, and the theme of fading beauty. Personaly I think your third staza is a poem on to itself. Technically, most flowers stop blooming before the windter months, but this was done in the spirit of a metaphor. Thanks for posting.

I really like the visual imagery found in this poem, and the theme of fading beauty. Personaly I think your third staza is a poem on to itself. Technically, most flowers stop blooming before the windter months, but this was done in the spirit of a metaphor. Thanks for posting.
8/4/2005 c1
21Torn Lover
Hey i'm reading that book you suggested. Plus the book you are reading right now is a good book. I love it! I have it checked out from the public library. So far I like that book. If you could email me maybe that would be cool. My email address is . Email me sometime we could be really good friends.

Hey i'm reading that book you suggested. Plus the book you are reading right now is a good book. I love it! I have it checked out from the public library. So far I like that book. If you could email me maybe that would be cool. My email address is . Email me sometime we could be really good friends.
8/3/2005 c1
28my-vision
This poem has its own glory, and what marvelous glory it is! Beautiful! Everything is put together well, except for grammar. :-) It should be "Smudges of brown replace" because smudges is plural, but it sounds good nonetheless! Great job! Terrific!

This poem has its own glory, and what marvelous glory it is! Beautiful! Everything is put together well, except for grammar. :-) It should be "Smudges of brown replace" because smudges is plural, but it sounds good nonetheless! Great job! Terrific!
7/15/2005 c1
32shinco
Ah, that's sad, but there's always MORE ROSES! ^_^ YAY! MORE FLOWERS, MORE BEAUTY! Especially in Heaven! I'll be there one day! Won't you? ^_^ I SURE HOPE SO! You're really nice, I can tell by your reviews! ^_^ Wonderful poem, very nice imagery! ^_^ And as always, wonderful rhyme scheme! It takes a lot of hard work to do that! ^_~

Ah, that's sad, but there's always MORE ROSES! ^_^ YAY! MORE FLOWERS, MORE BEAUTY! Especially in Heaven! I'll be there one day! Won't you? ^_^ I SURE HOPE SO! You're really nice, I can tell by your reviews! ^_^ Wonderful poem, very nice imagery! ^_^ And as always, wonderful rhyme scheme! It takes a lot of hard work to do that! ^_~
7/13/2005 c1
210Kelpylion
Very Shakespearean subject matter. Amazing avoidance of cliche' phrases, considering that the subject is written about so much - that's a good thing, not a bad thing. The contrast between before and after is particularly well-done, too.

Very Shakespearean subject matter. Amazing avoidance of cliche' phrases, considering that the subject is written about so much - that's a good thing, not a bad thing. The contrast between before and after is particularly well-done, too.
7/11/2005 c1 AubriannaKnight
Wow, you are amazing..I think this is one of the best I've read so far! I envy your writing abilities.. your choice of words is brilliant.
Wow, you are amazing..I think this is one of the best I've read so far! I envy your writing abilities.. your choice of words is brilliant.