for Summer9/22/2012 c1 
287Archia
Ah dear summer, and just around the corner too. I agree with you on this, that is summer and it is such a wonderful. I'm not sure if you're aware that this is one straight line instead of broken up. Nice poem.
287ArchiaAh dear summer, and just around the corner too. I agree with you on this, that is summer and it is such a wonderful. I'm not sure if you're aware that this is one straight line instead of broken up. Nice poem.
3/14/2010 c1 4lookingwest
Wow, great simplicity in this. I like your decision, which I hope was intentional, to leave the first line with no period and cap "The". It really made me look twice and I like how it flows right into the next sentence. It's very almost, well, experimental. And I'm a huge fan of experimental writing, so that was a plus! Great idea. Love you end the lines with a period, it really gives it definite finality.
4lookingwestWow, great simplicity in this. I like your decision, which I hope was intentional, to leave the first line with no period and cap "The". It really made me look twice and I like how it flows right into the next sentence. It's very almost, well, experimental. And I'm a huge fan of experimental writing, so that was a plus! Great idea. Love you end the lines with a period, it really gives it definite finality.
6/9/2008 c1 5LizardtheScribe
Nice haiku-the flow is good and the senses are utilized. However, you need to put it in haiku form, because at the moment, it looks more like an oddly punctuated sentence.
5LizardtheScribeNice haiku-the flow is good and the senses are utilized. However, you need to put it in haiku form, because at the moment, it looks more like an oddly punctuated sentence.
1/10/2005 c1 4heartbrokensoul
You might want to edit that. Summer honestly sucks. Every one is so happy with their summer love, that is why summer sucks.
4heartbrokensoulYou might want to edit that. Summer honestly sucks. Every one is so happy with their summer love, that is why summer sucks.