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12/21/2004 c2 2where'sthepotato
cliffhanger...yay...okay, the only advice I have is you might want to make the last paragraph of the first chapter a little longer, so we get a better sense of what's going on. Describe the charms in a little more detail, and whatever Tulgey Woods is. Other than that, this kicks ass totally...I do plays at my school, and yeah, I wou;dn't be surprised if the auditorium turned out to be a portal to another dimension one day...yeah, the place is a mes...anywaysyeah, just try and make things a little longer with a little more description so that it's clearer

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