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8/2/2005 c1 337Luthiena o Lorien
I do not know why, but I despise the first two lines -very strongly. The rest of the poem is nice, but those first two irk me.
3/11/2005 c1 13XxDragon Princess NikkixX
Another good one. You are very talented! I really liked this because it gave a sense of who you are. Great job!

12/28/2004 c1 84Escapist
Hm. This is a nice, clean poem with smooth lines, a smooth flow. I loved the musical composition stanza, especially the last two lines of it. Nice job.
12/22/2004 c1 7BeautifulEcho
i...don't even know where to begin. I know exactly how you feel, u related to me so well! That poem was totally awesome. I can tell it was written from deep down into your soul, which made it even better! I absolutely adore the line that goes "I simply aim to please anyone but myself". This is a mistake that i make way too often in my life. I always feel that if i haven't made atleast one person happy that day, then i myself can't be happy. I don't know why this is, but it's a habit i'm trying to break. Once again, excellent poem and your emotions were portrayed splendidly. Also, thanx so much for reviewing my poems. It really means alot to me when people tell me what they think. great job! keep writing!

12/22/2004 c1 24she's not breathing
i think you're really onto something here. i like the whole fit of this poem, what people see you as verses what you know you are. so different, and so much harsher. the imagery is also well-chosen and thought-provoking. only thing is at the second to last stanza, you seem to lose a little of the imagery and you write a little too structured and obvious. i'm just picky though. so good job overall! do me a favour and check out something i've written?

12/22/2004 c1 25pleasecometrue
Amazing imagery, it all flows very well. Great write.
12/22/2004 c1 9Meaningless Julia
This is really beautiful. I definitely see aspects of myself in this, feeling like a piece of furniture, everybody ignoring you. Very well expressed. Just on a technical note, might i suggest some of your lines are a tad prosaic? Maybe try to be more oblique and suggestive, make the reader work a little bit harder. On the whole though, this is really great.

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