for Loved and Lost12/31/2004 c1 
117xHannahx
interesting... i know the feeling of thinking you see someone, and them just disappearing. its soo unfair. nice job, although im a little bemused by "thereof" it seems somehow a little olde-worlde for the poem. other than that - tis good!
Han.
117xHannahxinteresting... i know the feeling of thinking you see someone, and them just disappearing. its soo unfair. nice job, although im a little bemused by "thereof" it seems somehow a little olde-worlde for the poem. other than that - tis good!
Han.
12/26/2004 c1 18Aged Parent Peggotty Barkis
I like the imagery of the mist in the night but at the end of the second sentence of each stanza oughtn't you to have a comma, because the second two sentences are fragments otherwise
18Aged Parent Peggotty BarkisI like the imagery of the mist in the night but at the end of the second sentence of each stanza oughtn't you to have a comma, because the second two sentences are fragments otherwise