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6/5/2006 c1 A Beautiful Nightmare
Ooh. I like it. Well done with keeping the syllables. But just one problem: "Down in this cold, dark abyss"... there should be a comma after cold... other than that... great job!
2/9/2006 c1 4eyesofahuntress
Short yet full of tension... nice work.


3/6/2005 c1 33sleepeaze
Wow, that was beautiful. *_*
12/30/2004 c1 243Manuel Fajar
Life is little things,

That we do and feel each day,—

Mint gum—Lip gloss—Sun. —m—
12/29/2004 c1 612simpleplan13
very powerful and true
12/29/2004 c1 dcopulsky
It sums up a feling well in a short space, but in three lines, it uses two bad cliches (dark abyss, shattered dreams)

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