for The Swirling Blaze of Undying Fire1/7/2005 c1 Amelia Grant
even tho it's short, this is very good! I like that you used the word 'flamenco' rather than something more sommon, too.
P.S.Thanks for the review, and yes, i'll post translations soon (i hope!).
even tho it's short, this is very good! I like that you used the word 'flamenco' rather than something more sommon, too.
P.S.Thanks for the review, and yes, i'll post translations soon (i hope!).
1/5/2005 c1 
94smile persephone
Exotic. Love the imagery you portray (of the flame, as well as the dancer). Well done!
(Thanks for all of the reviews, as well as the add on your Favorite Authors list! I really truly appreciate it!)
94smile persephoneExotic. Love the imagery you portray (of the flame, as well as the dancer). Well done!
(Thanks for all of the reviews, as well as the add on your Favorite Authors list! I really truly appreciate it!)
1/1/2005 c1 72linaeve
i enjoyed the alliteration- not glaring prominent, but it was noticeable in a subtle sort of way. the comparison of fire to a flamenco dancer was interesting & apt.
-lin
72linaevei enjoyed the alliteration- not glaring prominent, but it was noticeable in a subtle sort of way. the comparison of fire to a flamenco dancer was interesting & apt.
-lin
1/1/2005 c1 Made in U.S.A
Wow this was excellent! I usually cannot stand haikus but this here is just too good really. It has everything that a poem would need and fantastic imagery and just perfection. Keep writing and thanks so much for the review :D
Wow this was excellent! I usually cannot stand haikus but this here is just too good really. It has everything that a poem would need and fantastic imagery and just perfection. Keep writing and thanks so much for the review :D
1/1/2005 c1 dcopulsky
I like the imagery a lot. And the similarlity of the 'flame' words in the first two lines and the the 'da' words in last two lines. Reading the defintion of flamenco, is doesn't seem to fit with the image of a flame swirling. For a while, I was staring at the punctuation at the end of each line and trying to figure out if the three lines fit into one continual gramatical sentence, and then it confused and mildly annoye me when I didn't find anything.
I like the imagery a lot. And the similarlity of the 'flame' words in the first two lines and the the 'da' words in last two lines. Reading the defintion of flamenco, is doesn't seem to fit with the image of a flame swirling. For a while, I was staring at the punctuation at the end of each line and trying to figure out if the three lines fit into one continual gramatical sentence, and then it confused and mildly annoye me when I didn't find anything.