for A Dark Obsession2/8/2005 c4 
232Second Hand Screams
Only one thing: It's a bit Jr High in some points. Just the obsession parts, and the way the "revealing" lines from King are a bit canned. I like it, don't get me wrong. I almost love it, to be honest. I haven't read enough of it to want to have it's babies, but I'm close... ;)Anyways, yeah, I like it, and to be honest the fact that it's about a chick named Anna (my name) who has a liking for goths but can't do it herself (my secret. What can I say, I actually DO look dead in black. Can't take it, I'm vain:) ) is kinda freaking me out. It's a bit like me, get what I'm saying?Also, your one-liners are awesome!
232Second Hand ScreamsOnly one thing: It's a bit Jr High in some points. Just the obsession parts, and the way the "revealing" lines from King are a bit canned. I like it, don't get me wrong. I almost love it, to be honest. I haven't read enough of it to want to have it's babies, but I'm close... ;)Anyways, yeah, I like it, and to be honest the fact that it's about a chick named Anna (my name) who has a liking for goths but can't do it herself (my secret. What can I say, I actually DO look dead in black. Can't take it, I'm vain:) ) is kinda freaking me out. It's a bit like me, get what I'm saying?Also, your one-liners are awesome!
2/8/2005 c2 Second Hand Screams
there's no way this is your first fic. You're lying. This is fantastic. I'm SO reading the rest of this! Bye! Anna
there's no way this is your first fic. You're lying. This is fantastic. I'm SO reading the rest of this! Bye! Anna
2/7/2005 c7 peace etc
this is such a cool story! I love it so much. I love all the characters. Super curious about Render!
this is such a cool story! I love it so much. I love all the characters. Super curious about Render!
2/6/2005 c7 ace
i really enjoy your story. please update again soon.
i really enjoy your story. please update again soon.
2/6/2005 c7 chloe
cant wait for the next part and for render to come in!
cant wait for the next part and for render to come in!
2/4/2005 c7 2cbprice25
Ah! You updated! I don't know how I miss these things...
Great chapter (as usual). It's was cool to what Rook's like. You're letting us into the characters rather nicely. We know Rook, King, Bishop, Queen, and Pawn a bit (not much, but she's memorable). Oh, and a bit about Diablo, Ace, and Render. It's quite an accomplishment to have so many characters and already know most of them (especially for me-"who's Harry Potter again? oh and Voldemort-he's the bad guy right?").
(Although I do read them, I'm not much of a Harry Potter fan-drives my friend nuts.) Anyways, I can't wait for more!
2cbprice25Ah! You updated! I don't know how I miss these things...
Great chapter (as usual). It's was cool to what Rook's like. You're letting us into the characters rather nicely. We know Rook, King, Bishop, Queen, and Pawn a bit (not much, but she's memorable). Oh, and a bit about Diablo, Ace, and Render. It's quite an accomplishment to have so many characters and already know most of them (especially for me-"who's Harry Potter again? oh and Voldemort-he's the bad guy right?").
(Although I do read them, I'm not much of a Harry Potter fan-drives my friend nuts.) Anyways, I can't wait for more!
2/4/2005 c1 JT FAN
Hi me again.I just wanted to know if this story has always been rated R ? I thought it was PG-13.
Hi me again.I just wanted to know if this story has always been rated R ? I thought it was PG-13.
2/4/2005 c7 JT FAN
You should definitely bring Anna over to Renders club. But let Anna go with out Jessie. I dont really like her, shes VERY annoying. Rook didnt seem to like her either.Anna needs to branch out and make some other friends, have a social life away fron Jessie. King needs to get over himself. Boo Hoo some chick didnt want to sleep with him.GET OVER IT. I like how everyone is not all like "yeah I go to Hot Topic because Im hard core like that" or, "Since he/she was wearing all black I figured that they would be ok to hang out with". I cant tell how many times Ive read those lines in diff. stories.Too many is all ive got to say.I enjoy reading your story SO please update soon
You should definitely bring Anna over to Renders club. But let Anna go with out Jessie. I dont really like her, shes VERY annoying. Rook didnt seem to like her either.Anna needs to branch out and make some other friends, have a social life away fron Jessie. King needs to get over himself. Boo Hoo some chick didnt want to sleep with him.GET OVER IT. I like how everyone is not all like "yeah I go to Hot Topic because Im hard core like that" or, "Since he/she was wearing all black I figured that they would be ok to hang out with". I cant tell how many times Ive read those lines in diff. stories.Too many is all ive got to say.I enjoy reading your story SO please update soon
2/4/2005 c7 3unerasable words
Hahaha, I love the line; "I immediately lay down on the floor and began to snore. Only after a few seconds did I remember that I was supposed to close my eyes." HAHAHA. :D Well done, very nice chapter. Can't wait for more! :)
3unerasable wordsHahaha, I love the line; "I immediately lay down on the floor and began to snore. Only after a few seconds did I remember that I was supposed to close my eyes." HAHAHA. :D Well done, very nice chapter. Can't wait for more! :)
2/3/2005 c7 bleh
eek! i love your story! (goths=hella sexy) my family has been giving me weird looks from laughing at some of the funnier parts so you just know the story is good. anna might go to the club that render owns aye? the plot thickens... and how many chapters are there gonna be? dammit, not only was it a code purple in PE today its now a code blue also. becuse of the lack of simpsons i shall now go and worship your greatness in a shrine until you update.
love~michellita
eek! i love your story! (goths=hella sexy) my family has been giving me weird looks from laughing at some of the funnier parts so you just know the story is good. anna might go to the club that render owns aye? the plot thickens... and how many chapters are there gonna be? dammit, not only was it a code purple in PE today its now a code blue also. becuse of the lack of simpsons i shall now go and worship your greatness in a shrine until you update.
love~michellita
2/3/2005 c7 Rage
Awesome story! Bishop seems so hot! And Rook seems cool. Update a.s.a.p!
Awesome story! Bishop seems so hot! And Rook seems cool. Update a.s.a.p!
2/2/2005 c7 WildGoddess
I really liked your chapter. I still can't make up my mind between King and Bishop. They both seem perfect for her in different ways. Anyways update soon because I need closure or a sense of what's going to happen!
I really liked your chapter. I still can't make up my mind between King and Bishop. They both seem perfect for her in different ways. Anyways update soon because I need closure or a sense of what's going to happen!
2/2/2005 c7 2what-climbed-up-ur-arse
plz continue the story.. it's really good!keep up the good work.,..update soon..
2what-climbed-up-ur-arseplz continue the story.. it's really good!keep up the good work.,..update soon..
2/2/2005 c7 Hells Tenshi
Love it and love the fact the King is stalking her! Is she going down to the club? Please say she is! Anyway, update a.s.a.p!
Love it and love the fact the King is stalking her! Is she going down to the club? Please say she is! Anyway, update a.s.a.p!