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11/2/2009 c1 6letyoursoultakeflight
to suffocate or to save

- loved that line
7/7/2005 c1 3The Proxy Ninja
Simple and sweet- and the payload: "to suffocate or to save" wraps it up quite nicely.
6/14/2005 c1 1SomeCowgirl
Wow, not what I was expecting. Very Ponder-some.
3/13/2005 c1 AVIGON
Hey Jaclyn! It's been a while, but I still like your writing. Actually, this poem isn't my favourite, though I really, really like the first part ("i would like to / title this poem / you and the sky / but what will i / speak of?"). After that, it sorta kinda fails to keep my attention (you always had a way with images, but the second part just doesn't do it for me, you know? it's more two-dimensional than I'm used to).
3/2/2005 c1 8Written
beautiful. I loved it. nice rhythm and imagery- awesome diction.
1/2/2005 c1 3Aye Said
Ouh, I liked that

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