for As Long as There's Truth9/15/2005 c1 
15Getuie
The repetition of again in this poem is excellently timed. Every time it just gives one a deeper sence of the speakers feelings... You've summarised it well in your A/N. The mood does shift... nicely done. I liked it.
15GetuieThe repetition of again in this poem is excellently timed. Every time it just gives one a deeper sence of the speakers feelings... You've summarised it well in your A/N. The mood does shift... nicely done. I liked it.
1/23/2005 c1 23f34r3dl0s7s0ul
good poem...whatever the inspiration was it worked out well. keep it up
23f34r3dl0s7s0ulgood poem...whatever the inspiration was it worked out well. keep it up
1/15/2005 c1 42Emmytastic gal
WOW... LOVE IT. absolutely awesome. I love the repetitiveness and the flow, its gorgeous! thanks so much for your review... keep up the fabulous work. write on...
-Em
42Emmytastic galWOW... LOVE IT. absolutely awesome. I love the repetitiveness and the flow, its gorgeous! thanks so much for your review... keep up the fabulous work. write on...
-Em
1/11/2005 c1 16RuathaWehrling
Hi Echo! I see you posted some stuff! Yea! Allow me to return the favor and review this, then...
:) Awesome poem! I really like the way you sort of mellowed out at the end. And I really, REALLY liked the repetition of "Again". It both gives the poem a nice cadence and adds feeling to it.
About the only criticism I have concerns two stanzas (if I can call them that!) near the end. This one: "Face your fears / Lose hold of your tears / Believe" and the final one. These are the only two places in the poem where you leave three lines between each "Again" (as opposed to two). It sort of threw off the rhythm of the poem. The final stanza you can probably get away with, like it's a finale, but the one in the middle really feels sort of awkward, in my opinion. Why don't you read it through aloud and see what you think?
Well done! I'll be back for more, but first I've got to catch up with some other authors! I let too much slide over Christmas break and I need to catch up! Good luck!
Ruatha
16RuathaWehrlingHi Echo! I see you posted some stuff! Yea! Allow me to return the favor and review this, then...
:) Awesome poem! I really like the way you sort of mellowed out at the end. And I really, REALLY liked the repetition of "Again". It both gives the poem a nice cadence and adds feeling to it.
About the only criticism I have concerns two stanzas (if I can call them that!) near the end. This one: "Face your fears / Lose hold of your tears / Believe" and the final one. These are the only two places in the poem where you leave three lines between each "Again" (as opposed to two). It sort of threw off the rhythm of the poem. The final stanza you can probably get away with, like it's a finale, but the one in the middle really feels sort of awkward, in my opinion. Why don't you read it through aloud and see what you think?
Well done! I'll be back for more, but first I've got to catch up with some other authors! I let too much slide over Christmas break and I need to catch up! Good luck!
Ruatha
1/9/2005 c1 65AmaranthineMisery
first off, everything you write is beautiful... i agree at the begining you seem betrayed then your begging for relief and then it ends with understanding... i love it you make the transition so subtle even if u dont realize it... keep writing it would be a great loss if u didnt
65AmaranthineMiseryfirst off, everything you write is beautiful... i agree at the begining you seem betrayed then your begging for relief and then it ends with understanding... i love it you make the transition so subtle even if u dont realize it... keep writing it would be a great loss if u didnt
1/5/2005 c1 63InfiniteDreamer04
this was ok, but devils stradivarious is still my favorite. i like the line
"Sever the ties/Between truth and the lise"
Keep writing!
63InfiniteDreamer04this was ok, but devils stradivarious is still my favorite. i like the line
"Sever the ties/Between truth and the lise"
Keep writing!