for And Thus Lost Souls Still Sit9/24/2005 c1 
42Ian Shweltser
Great job! I really like the way you can say exactly what you want to with the right a mount of words.
~ian
42Ian ShweltserGreat job! I really like the way you can say exactly what you want to with the right a mount of words.
~ian
3/13/2005 c1 C. Earnshaw
callooh callay for ballads! this is really good. you aren't bad at ballads, you liar! keep it up.
~kitty
callooh callay for ballads! this is really good. you aren't bad at ballads, you liar! keep it up.
~kitty
2/24/2005 c1 3Brook-LeClair
Ooh. Thats really good. Extremely moving. Totally.
And your topic is so clear, and yet so hidden. Its good. I really like your work, and this is definately a favourite.
3Brook-LeClairOoh. Thats really good. Extremely moving. Totally.
And your topic is so clear, and yet so hidden. Its good. I really like your work, and this is definately a favourite.
1/19/2005 c1 292Fabian Cortez
Engrossing and heartfelt work that flowed well throughout.
Well Done to capture this painful subject as you have.
KEEP WRITING!
F.C
292Fabian CortezEngrossing and heartfelt work that flowed well throughout.
Well Done to capture this painful subject as you have.
KEEP WRITING!
F.C
1/16/2005 c1 50Chandra-Moon
Excellent piece of work...your rhymes are smooth and simple, and your word choice is flawless. :-D
Keep writing
50Chandra-MoonExcellent piece of work...your rhymes are smooth and simple, and your word choice is flawless. :-D
Keep writing
1/11/2005 c1 18ezilyconfused
I really liked the rhyming in this poem... It's seldom that I find rhyming poems that roll off the tongue like this one... Great poem! And thanks for your kind review.
[steven]
18ezilyconfusedI really liked the rhyming in this poem... It's seldom that I find rhyming poems that roll off the tongue like this one... Great poem! And thanks for your kind review.
[steven]
1/5/2005 c1 36Oath
Nice ballad but some of the words you use are a bit misleading. It might just be how i've read it or something but the planes were taken in alarm, it sounds in the ballad that people weren't frightened. You focused mainly on those inside the towers, which was very heartfely and emotionly written. Also, this is mostly just personal because i tend to dislike ryming but sand, maybe ash, corpses, and metal.. Although, now that i think about it you could have used sand as symbolism liek the saying "sand slip through your fingers" just like the terrorists seemingly did. Other than those slight misunderstandings the poem was brilliant and gave the understandable justice that such an event needs. Very heartfelt.
36OathNice ballad but some of the words you use are a bit misleading. It might just be how i've read it or something but the planes were taken in alarm, it sounds in the ballad that people weren't frightened. You focused mainly on those inside the towers, which was very heartfely and emotionly written. Also, this is mostly just personal because i tend to dislike ryming but sand, maybe ash, corpses, and metal.. Although, now that i think about it you could have used sand as symbolism liek the saying "sand slip through your fingers" just like the terrorists seemingly did. Other than those slight misunderstandings the poem was brilliant and gave the understandable justice that such an event needs. Very heartfelt.