for Alice's Broken Wings4/10/2005 c12 
26perdita's kiss
that was corny, he's full of shit. I liked Damien at first, he was cool, but I dunno, he's full of shit. Then again, it could work out. But what about Will and Lilith? I'm getting ahead, please update soon!
Written Tragedy
26perdita's kissthat was corny, he's full of shit. I liked Damien at first, he was cool, but I dunno, he's full of shit. Then again, it could work out. But what about Will and Lilith? I'm getting ahead, please update soon!
Written Tragedy
3/9/2005 c11 26perdita's kiss
Question, at this point, how old is Alice? Just wondering. Great chapter, I just wish there was more about her mother. Update soon!
Oh Yes, Oh Yes, Oh Shit
26perdita's kissQuestion, at this point, how old is Alice? Just wondering. Great chapter, I just wish there was more about her mother. Update soon!
Oh Yes, Oh Yes, Oh Shit
3/9/2005 c11 5clair-a-net
She had a good thing going for her. So where is she going now? will she ever see her daughter again? Why wont she talk to her mom and give her hope? so good please write more. clair_a_net
5clair-a-netShe had a good thing going for her. So where is she going now? will she ever see her daughter again? Why wont she talk to her mom and give her hope? so good please write more. clair_a_net
3/8/2005 c1 Lost Chi
Great first chapter! I am really going to make sure I keep an eye out for it in the future! You really have quite a writing talent. I hope Alice has fun on her adventures!
By the way, can anyone please read a story I have on the site. It's called The Pocketwatch. Please read and review. Thank you very much!
Great first chapter! I am really going to make sure I keep an eye out for it in the future! You really have quite a writing talent. I hope Alice has fun on her adventures!
By the way, can anyone please read a story I have on the site. It's called The Pocketwatch. Please read and review. Thank you very much!
3/2/2005 c10 Elizabeth Birne
I love the story so much! I like Damien so much, but I'm beginning to like Will as well. There were a few change point of views and a few grammatical, but nothing major.
I love the story so much! I like Damien so much, but I'm beginning to like Will as well. There were a few change point of views and a few grammatical, but nothing major.
3/2/2005 c10 26perdita's kiss
Wow, this is way cool. Horrible cliff hanger-ish things, they should all die. Great plot. Well, update soon!
Burnt Page
26perdita's kissWow, this is way cool. Horrible cliff hanger-ish things, they should all die. Great plot. Well, update soon!
Burnt Page
1/6/2005 c2 ponychick08
very interesting, I must say. Damien sounds hott, but that's probably just me. I have different opinions on some things. a few grammatical errors, but nothing too bad. Keep up the good work.
very interesting, I must say. Damien sounds hott, but that's probably just me. I have different opinions on some things. a few grammatical errors, but nothing too bad. Keep up the good work.
1/5/2005 c3 6iglooey
Wow, awesome story. I love your descriptions and the characters you created. They have interesting flaws, like Damien. There were some mistakes that I noticed though. In the beginning, you said that Alice doesn't know how to ride a horse, but she immediately knows that to make the horse stop you have to pull the reins. There are also some parts where you use different point of views that don't correspond with each other. In the second chapter, Alison is talking in first person, but then she begins to talk in third person like: "you nod slowly and he opens the door." (sort of confusing). I really love your action scenes because you make them become alive. This is a very mesmerizing and absorbing story. Amazing job.
6iglooeyWow, awesome story. I love your descriptions and the characters you created. They have interesting flaws, like Damien. There were some mistakes that I noticed though. In the beginning, you said that Alice doesn't know how to ride a horse, but she immediately knows that to make the horse stop you have to pull the reins. There are also some parts where you use different point of views that don't correspond with each other. In the second chapter, Alison is talking in first person, but then she begins to talk in third person like: "you nod slowly and he opens the door." (sort of confusing). I really love your action scenes because you make them become alive. This is a very mesmerizing and absorbing story. Amazing job.