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2/18/2005 c1 15Jamari
i love how you describe changing feelings and wanting to be noticed. amazing~Lauren
2/12/2005 c1 Frodo
I can't really critique your poetry because I really just don't understand poetry sometimes, but I can tell you what I liked.

First off, I can kind of relate to this like I'm sure many girls who were/thought they were in love. Things don't always work out, and there's all those emotions that are there that make a person want to go insane, and the person eventually realizes "Why do I care? Was it really even worth it?" I guess what I'm trying to say is that this poem rings true with many others.

I like the repeating of lines in poems, so I enjoyed seeing the "what you always wanted" variation lines. You didn't overuse it, so that's another plus for this poem.

Nicely done. -Micah

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