for Can't Get Me1/25/2005 c1 
2Sakura Ara
Ooh! Nice! The enjambments are something else. ^_^ You just have to edit a few minor spelling errors in the piece.
2Sakura AraOoh! Nice! The enjambments are something else. ^_^ You just have to edit a few minor spelling errors in the piece.
1/24/2005 c1 36tyrantvirus
I like how you set this up, with what you had you organized it well. I can't help thinking this is a little childish of a piece. I also see it was meant to be a song, nice as it was I don't think the begining was too great. I can totally see that this is a song but try to use more rhyming and grouped structrue, verse chorus verse kind of stuff.
Well, good job. Keep up the writing. Every letter is practice for your masterpiece.
36tyrantvirusI like how you set this up, with what you had you organized it well. I can't help thinking this is a little childish of a piece. I also see it was meant to be a song, nice as it was I don't think the begining was too great. I can totally see that this is a song but try to use more rhyming and grouped structrue, verse chorus verse kind of stuff.
Well, good job. Keep up the writing. Every letter is practice for your masterpiece.