for Men: We are not all bad11/13/2005 c1 nothingyouneedtoknow
I would say your main problem is punctuation and caps lock. Otherwise I might be inclined to actually read your work. I'm sorry I didn't read this before reviewing, but works that are pretty much one run-on sentence are too hard to understand.
I would say your main problem is punctuation and caps lock. Otherwise I might be inclined to actually read your work. I'm sorry I didn't read this before reviewing, but works that are pretty much one run-on sentence are too hard to understand.
2/26/2005 c1 
8gangster-dolly
My God go out and buy a dictionary. It is your friend, take care of it and it might teach you EVERYTHING that you don't know, judging by this 'essay'.
Also you advertise selling your writing though you can't even spell the word, and also why would someone want to buy your stuff when you can't even put a capital letter at the start of a sentence. My half-brother is 5 and just learnt how write his own name. Even he knows it's a proper noun. Christ if he can get it right you should be able to.
For the sake of all writers around the world, burn your PC and any other communication items in your home. We must lock you up and teach you a few things.
-gangster-dolly
8gangster-dollyMy God go out and buy a dictionary. It is your friend, take care of it and it might teach you EVERYTHING that you don't know, judging by this 'essay'.
Also you advertise selling your writing though you can't even spell the word, and also why would someone want to buy your stuff when you can't even put a capital letter at the start of a sentence. My half-brother is 5 and just learnt how write his own name. Even he knows it's a proper noun. Christ if he can get it right you should be able to.
For the sake of all writers around the world, burn your PC and any other communication items in your home. We must lock you up and teach you a few things.
-gangster-dolly
1/28/2005 c1 3melody mama
You pig, haha, just kidding. No really, its nice to hear a guy who doesn't want to get in a woman's pants. I'm glad some of you understand, plz tell the others. Just one thing, you might want to proof read this essay and grammar chekc it. I caught a lot of misspelled words.
3melody mamaYou pig, haha, just kidding. No really, its nice to hear a guy who doesn't want to get in a woman's pants. I'm glad some of you understand, plz tell the others. Just one thing, you might want to proof read this essay and grammar chekc it. I caught a lot of misspelled words.
1/27/2005 c1 115Snick Mcnicket
I dont care if you dont like my writtings who are u to tell me how to write or what to write a writer writes and if you dont get that reviewers of my storys then just dont read them however if you like them thank you for all your good reviewers flamers are not needed and not wanted ty.
115Snick McnicketI dont care if you dont like my writtings who are u to tell me how to write or what to write a writer writes and if you dont get that reviewers of my storys then just dont read them however if you like them thank you for all your good reviewers flamers are not needed and not wanted ty.
1/26/2005 c1 3Krismet
Oh dear God, please do not ever write again. This was not worth the few minutes it took to read it.
You had some pretty good ideas (I think?) but most of them were buried in this God-awful crap you claim is writing.
Now go back to your computer, and put this into Microsoft Word and edit it. PLEASE. For the sake of my eyes. If you could put it up here, you could put it into a word processor. Or your could simply go and finish grade 2. Either way it will improve your writing incredibly.
3KrismetOh dear God, please do not ever write again. This was not worth the few minutes it took to read it.
You had some pretty good ideas (I think?) but most of them were buried in this God-awful crap you claim is writing.
Now go back to your computer, and put this into Microsoft Word and edit it. PLEASE. For the sake of my eyes. If you could put it up here, you could put it into a word processor. Or your could simply go and finish grade 2. Either way it will improve your writing incredibly.
1/26/2005 c1 7tryp
I would be more inclined to agree with you if your writing was a touch easier to read, honestly. The editing leaves a little to be desired. I also think you overgeneralize a little bit. Not all women think men are like that. I certainly don't.
7trypI would be more inclined to agree with you if your writing was a touch easier to read, honestly. The editing leaves a little to be desired. I also think you overgeneralize a little bit. Not all women think men are like that. I certainly don't.
1/25/2005 c1 4zzxasd43and
okay let's do the story first.this was pretty good. i'm agreeing with most of this shit (18 year old male) but i do think punctuation and caps and spelling and grammar should maybe be placed in higher regard.i read your bio and realize you like to run on with it but, christ, half the people hate your crap not because it's bad. but because it's done hastily and doesn't seem to be the most thought-out stories.i could go on but this isn't a review of your bio. it's the story. i liked the story and just had to add those extra comments. sorry for babbling.
and go eagles!
4zzxasd43andokay let's do the story first.this was pretty good. i'm agreeing with most of this shit (18 year old male) but i do think punctuation and caps and spelling and grammar should maybe be placed in higher regard.i read your bio and realize you like to run on with it but, christ, half the people hate your crap not because it's bad. but because it's done hastily and doesn't seem to be the most thought-out stories.i could go on but this isn't a review of your bio. it's the story. i liked the story and just had to add those extra comments. sorry for babbling.
and go eagles!
1/25/2005 c1 4shegal92
This is a very true essay and has a handful of great points. It makes me reconsider my own thinking, thanks.
4shegal92This is a very true essay and has a handful of great points. It makes me reconsider my own thinking, thanks.
1/25/2005 c1 1Formerly
You may just be the worst possible representative of mankind extant in the world today.
1FormerlyYou may just be the worst possible representative of mankind extant in the world today.
1/25/2005 c1 3I Am The Mystical Penguin
An interesting point you've made, though it probably would come across a lot stronger if it were more cleanly written (a person who lies is a liar, not a lair). Also, to say that 90-99% of men are losers, liars, cheaters, and pigs, does more to hurt your argument than help it. While I do not doubt that there are far too many slimeball males in the world, that percentage is outrageously high! 50% would be one in every two males and I've met enough decent guys to know that they can't possibly be that rare! You were on the right track but you didn't go the right way about it.
3I Am The Mystical PenguinAn interesting point you've made, though it probably would come across a lot stronger if it were more cleanly written (a person who lies is a liar, not a lair). Also, to say that 90-99% of men are losers, liars, cheaters, and pigs, does more to hurt your argument than help it. While I do not doubt that there are far too many slimeball males in the world, that percentage is outrageously high! 50% would be one in every two males and I've met enough decent guys to know that they can't possibly be that rare! You were on the right track but you didn't go the right way about it.
1/25/2005 c1 blerpblerp
Oi! I appreciate the subject matter, really I do, but you've got a major problem with run-on sentences. The first 100 words alone were an entire sentence, I believe. Anyways, if you want ladies to read this without getting a headache, you should try cleaning up your writing a bit. Although, what you say is true. We're not all bad.
Oi! I appreciate the subject matter, really I do, but you've got a major problem with run-on sentences. The first 100 words alone were an entire sentence, I believe. Anyways, if you want ladies to read this without getting a headache, you should try cleaning up your writing a bit. Although, what you say is true. We're not all bad.