for My world9/18/2005 c1 
33lostfish
Well, I'm sorry if thats how your world is like. Seems a bit much for a fifteen year old, but hey, I'm not implying anything.
Right, well this poem has really good imagery. I'm not going to say I can relate, but the line about 'standing nakes and everyone staring.' well, its weird, but I fear that. I dunno. Good poem, anyhow.
33lostfishWell, I'm sorry if thats how your world is like. Seems a bit much for a fifteen year old, but hey, I'm not implying anything.
Right, well this poem has really good imagery. I'm not going to say I can relate, but the line about 'standing nakes and everyone staring.' well, its weird, but I fear that. I dunno. Good poem, anyhow.
8/18/2005 c1 Yami Wah
I feel like such an amateur... Thankyou for letting me see a part of your world... it's inspiring.
I feel like such an amateur... Thankyou for letting me see a part of your world... it's inspiring.
7/7/2005 c1 purplePatterns
Ya thats my world 2... well kinda sorta in a way... ok ok so my world isn't like 100% like that, but pretty damn close
Ya thats my world 2... well kinda sorta in a way... ok ok so my world isn't like 100% like that, but pretty damn close
7/2/2005 c1 63lackluster
powerful! i like how you didn't go further, just gave a bit of what your world is like...great job!
~tuesday
63lacklusterpowerful! i like how you didn't go further, just gave a bit of what your world is like...great job!
~tuesday
6/16/2005 c1 7Syns
You haven't lost your touch. I'm relieved.
Thanks for the reviews, by the way.
And I'm glad you're still writing!
7SynsYou haven't lost your touch. I'm relieved.
Thanks for the reviews, by the way.
And I'm glad you're still writing!
6/14/2005 c1 141AllyCred
*WOW*...that was very powerful..so much emotion coming through...i love it...i can relate to parts...so deep and just amazing...well done. lots of love ~AllyCred~
141AllyCred*WOW*...that was very powerful..so much emotion coming through...i love it...i can relate to parts...so deep and just amazing...well done. lots of love ~AllyCred~
5/28/2005 c1 65dancingintherain
this world that everyone blinds themself too, that everyome pretends it isn't true...
insightful words, they ring so true...
nice job
muchLUB-kerr
65dancingintherainthis world that everyone blinds themself too, that everyome pretends it isn't true...
insightful words, they ring so true...
nice job
muchLUB-kerr
4/18/2005 c1 1Syrins
Yes. Welcome to -the- world.
Through eyes of knowledge I understand. And little will they know.
I enjoyed this piece very much.
1SyrinsYes. Welcome to -the- world.
Through eyes of knowledge I understand. And little will they know.
I enjoyed this piece very much.
1/30/2005 c1 1Fabula Scriptor
This is an interesting piece, however, it is a poem. It simply does not belong under prose. I like it but I feel that it's unfinished, like there is a story involved but incomplete. Also ome of the parts fall out of the questioning rythem, and it is slightly jarring to read. It has a lot of potential, but needs some polishing. Feel free to disregard everything that I've said (except the part about submitting it under poetry).
1Fabula ScriptorThis is an interesting piece, however, it is a poem. It simply does not belong under prose. I like it but I feel that it's unfinished, like there is a story involved but incomplete. Also ome of the parts fall out of the questioning rythem, and it is slightly jarring to read. It has a lot of potential, but needs some polishing. Feel free to disregard everything that I've said (except the part about submitting it under poetry).