for It was better then8/26/2006 c1 
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The jumps in time and point of view make it seem like notes you wrote for yourself. Since it IS written from a first person POV, why not him just telling what happened five years ago instead of jumping? Otherwise, that was the only thing bothering me. Good story, catching beginning and you are good at writing!
24Limited EditionThe jumps in time and point of view make it seem like notes you wrote for yourself. Since it IS written from a first person POV, why not him just telling what happened five years ago instead of jumping? Otherwise, that was the only thing bothering me. Good story, catching beginning and you are good at writing!
2/3/2005 c1 7Maris. S
Bleh! IYA! YOU HAVE TO WRITE MORE! ::dies:: That was such a hot lime but I want hard-core lemon! ::lol:: Just update when you get the chance to ^.~v
7Maris. SBleh! IYA! YOU HAVE TO WRITE MORE! ::dies:: That was such a hot lime but I want hard-core lemon! ::lol:: Just update when you get the chance to ^.~v
2/2/2005 c1 7ziggy pop eno
Cute and hot. You're a good writer. And thanks for your review-it brightened my day.
7ziggy pop enoCute and hot. You're a good writer. And thanks for your review-it brightened my day.