for Volume Four8/29/2007 c1 
31freakyAngel
Oh my Lord.
Can you tell me what was on your mind when you wrote this? It's not complete enough to satisfy me. Wait, that just sounded wrong.
Anyway, yeah. What the heck did you make out to be happening?
31freakyAngelOh my Lord.
Can you tell me what was on your mind when you wrote this? It's not complete enough to satisfy me. Wait, that just sounded wrong.
Anyway, yeah. What the heck did you make out to be happening?
6/16/2007 c1 2Tetelestai
Ohh my goodness.
So I'm guessing that Rayne's alive and faked her own death just because she didn't want to hurt either men? That's pretty immature of her haha. Grr poor Sean and Rowan...
Great one-shot!
2TetelestaiOhh my goodness.
So I'm guessing that Rayne's alive and faked her own death just because she didn't want to hurt either men? That's pretty immature of her haha. Grr poor Sean and Rowan...
Great one-shot!
6/2/2006 c1 CTRL
...Okay, wow. I'm not sure if I understand this completely, but uh:Rayne couldn't decide whether to choose between her boyfriend or the new guy she likes, so she plots her fake death, or something like that?Ahh.. Confused-ness.But uh, this was pretty good, a bit confusing though.
...Okay, wow. I'm not sure if I understand this completely, but uh:Rayne couldn't decide whether to choose between her boyfriend or the new guy she likes, so she plots her fake death, or something like that?Ahh.. Confused-ness.But uh, this was pretty good, a bit confusing though.
3/26/2006 c1 Preetie
Wtf, mate?
She's effing ALIVE? -deep breath- Alright...I'm still getting over the shock.
Nonetheless, it's a wonderful piece of literature. You did well.
Wtf, mate?
She's effing ALIVE? -deep breath- Alright...I'm still getting over the shock.
Nonetheless, it's a wonderful piece of literature. You did well.
10/10/2005 c1 8alexialynne
you should really see my expression as I stared into the monitor at the last paragraph for like...5 minutes (i swear it felt longer than that)..
I'm still trying to comprehend the fact that the story ended. firstly, i'm gonna go off paranoid like everyone else (this is the fun part) : WTF! SHE DIDNT DIE! (ok- so i sorta guessed that she didnt from your summary..but still) SHE DIDNT DIE! THEN WATS WITH ALL THE FREAKING TROUBLE! WHY WOULD ANYONE WANNA DO THAT? IS HER SISTER INSANE! CANT SHE STAND UP FOR HERSELF?1? W-T-H!
{breathes in...and out...in...and out}
ok, now for the second part. This story is BRILLIANT. the flow was good and the plot was gripping. the only con was that u tried to fit too much into too little words.. But because you did that, you pushed the story to such an extreme that the climax in the end was absolutely CLIMATIC. even though i'm startled by the ending, but from a writer's point of view, i'm gonna have to give you the thumbs up for doing it. kudos.
it was smart, creative and riveting. at first I thought i'd really like to know what happened after that.. i thought this should be more than a one shot. but now that i've calmed down, i have to say that this story is magnificient standing by itself. it leaves SO much for the readers to ponder and grasp without losing touch with the core.
fascinating.if u dont know by now, i loved it.
take care. keep writing. i'm booking u in my list. :D
hugz
8alexialynneyou should really see my expression as I stared into the monitor at the last paragraph for like...5 minutes (i swear it felt longer than that)..
I'm still trying to comprehend the fact that the story ended. firstly, i'm gonna go off paranoid like everyone else (this is the fun part) : WTF! SHE DIDNT DIE! (ok- so i sorta guessed that she didnt from your summary..but still) SHE DIDNT DIE! THEN WATS WITH ALL THE FREAKING TROUBLE! WHY WOULD ANYONE WANNA DO THAT? IS HER SISTER INSANE! CANT SHE STAND UP FOR HERSELF?1? W-T-H!
{breathes in...and out...in...and out}
ok, now for the second part. This story is BRILLIANT. the flow was good and the plot was gripping. the only con was that u tried to fit too much into too little words.. But because you did that, you pushed the story to such an extreme that the climax in the end was absolutely CLIMATIC. even though i'm startled by the ending, but from a writer's point of view, i'm gonna have to give you the thumbs up for doing it. kudos.
it was smart, creative and riveting. at first I thought i'd really like to know what happened after that.. i thought this should be more than a one shot. but now that i've calmed down, i have to say that this story is magnificient standing by itself. it leaves SO much for the readers to ponder and grasp without losing touch with the core.
fascinating.if u dont know by now, i loved it.
take care. keep writing. i'm booking u in my list. :D
hugz
9/25/2005 c1 1SouledChampion
Holy [bleeping] hell! She *didn't* die? What the hell... sorry, I just have to get over my shock. How could that be only a one-shot? I mean, it works as a one-shot, it does, because you leave your readers with a sense of mystery and 'What the hell?', which is a good. But I seriously think you should develop this into more. I, for one, would be checking everyday to see if you updated. The plot twists and subtle storylines are brilliant. :)
1SouledChampionHoly [bleeping] hell! She *didn't* die? What the hell... sorry, I just have to get over my shock. How could that be only a one-shot? I mean, it works as a one-shot, it does, because you leave your readers with a sense of mystery and 'What the hell?', which is a good. But I seriously think you should develop this into more. I, for one, would be checking everyday to see if you updated. The plot twists and subtle storylines are brilliant. :)
8/9/2005 c1 4annicel
Wait a minute, Rayne didn't die? What? lol If so, then, holy crap, what a bitch to put her boyfriend through so much crap just because she couldn't figure out who she wanted more.
Sorry, excuse my outburst... lol
Anyhoo, very intriguing story. I love the little twist you threw in with the 'secret' love. You're so good at stuff like that. Are you planning to keep this as a one shot? It wouldn't be bad either way, but I was just curious.
Well, great job, as always. You're awesome and talented and wonderful and all that happy shit. lol Keep plugging away at your brilliant stories, people are bound to notice your talent sooner or later.
Much love and luck... :o)
4annicelWait a minute, Rayne didn't die? What? lol If so, then, holy crap, what a bitch to put her boyfriend through so much crap just because she couldn't figure out who she wanted more.
Sorry, excuse my outburst... lol
Anyhoo, very intriguing story. I love the little twist you threw in with the 'secret' love. You're so good at stuff like that. Are you planning to keep this as a one shot? It wouldn't be bad either way, but I was just curious.
Well, great job, as always. You're awesome and talented and wonderful and all that happy shit. lol Keep plugging away at your brilliant stories, people are bound to notice your talent sooner or later.
Much love and luck... :o)
2/5/2005 c1 gothicbunnie
Hey, just wanted to ask if theirs going to be another chapter...Anyways, good story so far.
Hey, just wanted to ask if theirs going to be another chapter...Anyways, good story so far.
2/4/2005 c1 14arashi099
Very interesting beginning. I'm curious to find out how things will go. I kind of thought I wanted a lot more details from Rayne's journal to have more of an emotional affect on the reader and to show the progress of her feelings a bit more clearly, but with the way things turned by the end of the chapter, especially the very sharp change in Faune's attitude, it seems maybe volume 3 isn't so important (although I still would like to read more of it). Anyway, very good writing, and I hope you continue. ^_^
14arashi099Very interesting beginning. I'm curious to find out how things will go. I kind of thought I wanted a lot more details from Rayne's journal to have more of an emotional affect on the reader and to show the progress of her feelings a bit more clearly, but with the way things turned by the end of the chapter, especially the very sharp change in Faune's attitude, it seems maybe volume 3 isn't so important (although I still would like to read more of it). Anyway, very good writing, and I hope you continue. ^_^