for Committment2/21/2005 c1 
32charisma1525
Ok... wow. There's something about this one that I really really like. It's honest and true and I could really relate to it.
32charisma1525Ok... wow. There's something about this one that I really really like. It's honest and true and I could really relate to it.
2/11/2005 c1 Calibrated Addict
I like this. It has a flow-not a rhythm-but a flow that is very nice. Your rhymes seem awkward: they aren't constant throughout-this can be ok, though. I might consider taking out the 5th line; is it needed?
I like this. It has a flow-not a rhythm-but a flow that is very nice. Your rhymes seem awkward: they aren't constant throughout-this can be ok, though. I might consider taking out the 5th line; is it needed?