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2/22/2005 c1 24katmonkey
As soon as I read the first line I thought "It's the competition!" lol I didn't get round to entering this contest (busy with school _
2/18/2005 c1 150SpawnMeister666
Its about time you wrote something new! Who knows, maybe you'll even catch up to me one day!

Anyway, this was well written, with my only real gripe with the piece being that I find it hard to believe a vendor at a carnival would stab someone for throwing money at them.

In my experience, such vendors are only there to try to fleece as much money as possible out of unsuspecting mugs, and as a result in such circumstances surely the natural reaction of the vendor would have been to pocket the 3 dollars and move on to trying to find the next idiot to play his game.

Of course, being a work of fiction the suspension of believablility is the whole point anyway, so I wont go on about it any more!

Good luck in the competition by the way!

Spawny

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