for The Broken Road1/6/2019 c23 Guest
Definitely one of the best reads I have read! Though, there were times I felt like strangling Logan but it was understandable.
Definitely one of the best reads I have read! Though, there were times I felt like strangling Logan but it was understandable.
10/23/2018 c26 REGRETABLE
This was a wonderful story! I'll have to check out your published material - but this was a great story. Loved it!
This was a wonderful story! I'll have to check out your published material - but this was a great story. Loved it!
4/5/2018 c26 Acie
I loved this story, Lilly wad great and so was Logan, the character development was beautiful and I think that, overall, this story doesn't need much improvement
I loved this story, Lilly wad great and so was Logan, the character development was beautiful and I think that, overall, this story doesn't need much improvement
8/31/2014 c1 Julietish
Hi! It's Juliet from A Drop of Romeo. When your story was featured on ADoR, this review was written for it: In this story the author does a fantastic job of bringing you back in time. She uses terminology and concepts that fit the time period, making sure that her story is as believable as possible. Her characters are so amazingly real and flawed, thanks the brilliant depth and emotion she gave them, and you will love Logan and Lillian from beginning to end. At first the story seems a little hard to follow, thanks to the number of transitions between Logan and Lillian's points points of view, but soon after that, the transitions are few and far between.
As the story goes on, it begins to flow with a great deal of eloquence. In my opinion, one of the best things about this story is the author's use of vocabulary. Just by reading a short piece of her story, you can see her vast understanding of the English language. And she uses that understanding to add detail to the superb plot of her story. The plot is fairly cliche, but I will say that it's cliche in a good way, using mystery and drama to add a new and exciting feeling to the story.
Hi! It's Juliet from A Drop of Romeo. When your story was featured on ADoR, this review was written for it: In this story the author does a fantastic job of bringing you back in time. She uses terminology and concepts that fit the time period, making sure that her story is as believable as possible. Her characters are so amazingly real and flawed, thanks the brilliant depth and emotion she gave them, and you will love Logan and Lillian from beginning to end. At first the story seems a little hard to follow, thanks to the number of transitions between Logan and Lillian's points points of view, but soon after that, the transitions are few and far between.
As the story goes on, it begins to flow with a great deal of eloquence. In my opinion, one of the best things about this story is the author's use of vocabulary. Just by reading a short piece of her story, you can see her vast understanding of the English language. And she uses that understanding to add detail to the superb plot of her story. The plot is fairly cliche, but I will say that it's cliche in a good way, using mystery and drama to add a new and exciting feeling to the story.
7/9/2014 c26 Grespitchied
Ughhh wow! I just finished the story! It's so gripping! I never thought I would enjoy such a story! Their love making is so intense and passionate that it heightens the thrill of the story. The period where they were lost from each other wasa breaking my heart. I just anted them to figure it out but it was just taking forever. I was impressed with how the story rolled from there. I wish there was a next book because I enjoyed their relationship so much.
Congrats on the book
Ughhh wow! I just finished the story! It's so gripping! I never thought I would enjoy such a story! Their love making is so intense and passionate that it heightens the thrill of the story. The period where they were lost from each other wasa breaking my heart. I just anted them to figure it out but it was just taking forever. I was impressed with how the story rolled from there. I wish there was a next book because I enjoyed their relationship so much.
Congrats on the book
12/15/2013 c26 NerdNotSoSmart
The Broken Road reminds me much of the works of Judith McNaught, Jude Deveraux, Julie Garwood and many other novelists who choose to write in the same genre. The plot has much of the same underlying structure and it is deem-able as a cliche. With that said, no wonder the cliches are all heartwarming, pleasurable and bewitching, they all have that aura which invites you to read them even when you know the outcome. Your piece was no different.
Lilly Caine was a rather well-liked character, and very much like all the other contemporary heroines I've read of, save for her disability which even I forgot was there as the story progressed. But even when I forgot it was a disability, I could imagine myself blinded and going through the motions just like she had done. You've depicted her situation with ample caution and expressive detail which I never once felt wasn't necessary. There were numerous grammatical errors which grated my nerves a bit at first, like your use of the word 'then' instead of 'than,' but as I came to this author's note I understood why it had happened.
All in all, I quite liked The Broken Road in spite of the fact that some things confused me, like the fact that you kept on calling Lilly 'Lillian' even after her real identity was revealed. I honestly think that with a little editing, I might see it in the local bookstore soon. And that is my sincere hope.
Congratulations on having so many works published, you are an inspiration to aspiring writers everywhere. Please don't take my review negatively because all that I said, I was earnest about and I really think this book has potential. Good luck.
The Broken Road reminds me much of the works of Judith McNaught, Jude Deveraux, Julie Garwood and many other novelists who choose to write in the same genre. The plot has much of the same underlying structure and it is deem-able as a cliche. With that said, no wonder the cliches are all heartwarming, pleasurable and bewitching, they all have that aura which invites you to read them even when you know the outcome. Your piece was no different.
Lilly Caine was a rather well-liked character, and very much like all the other contemporary heroines I've read of, save for her disability which even I forgot was there as the story progressed. But even when I forgot it was a disability, I could imagine myself blinded and going through the motions just like she had done. You've depicted her situation with ample caution and expressive detail which I never once felt wasn't necessary. There were numerous grammatical errors which grated my nerves a bit at first, like your use of the word 'then' instead of 'than,' but as I came to this author's note I understood why it had happened.
All in all, I quite liked The Broken Road in spite of the fact that some things confused me, like the fact that you kept on calling Lilly 'Lillian' even after her real identity was revealed. I honestly think that with a little editing, I might see it in the local bookstore soon. And that is my sincere hope.
Congratulations on having so many works published, you are an inspiration to aspiring writers everywhere. Please don't take my review negatively because all that I said, I was earnest about and I really think this book has potential. Good luck.
11/8/2013 c23 
2PaintedPicture
I can't tell you how beautiful this story is. In the chapters with rebecca and Lilly and Logan. I couldn't help but hate him. I cried a constant flow of tears as I felt my heart sting and writhe in pain for the loss that Lilly felt. I don't cry very often, not even in sad parts in movies (except lion king)
I feel so inspired and encouraged by your story, you have no idea how much! I love your writing and I do intend to read more from you, I hope you haven't totally forsaken fictionpress and keep posting books and stories on here. Keep the little people inspired yeah?
I did notice, a few grammatical errors here and there and some grammar parts where I got confused not knowing which word was best to use and it made me think of ms word saying 'please revise sentence'
Your character construction was something akin to magic, not only did they develop and grow, they never lost their original personality traits. Although I resonated emotionally with Lilly, the other perspectives were greatly advantageous. I loved how at one point both lilly and logan thought the exact same thing, showing their deep emotional bond and dedication, its the small things that make a story great, know what I mean?
In a little vindictive and spiteful mood I was relishing in Logans despair and got angry at him for being mad.
I just wanted to praise where its needed, its about 3 or 4 in the morning and I have to be up at about 7 to start my day, I just couldn't stop reading! I blame you for my tiredness for the on coming busy day I'll be having, but its with great satisfaction in it knowing that your story will stick with me as I read others', feeling as if I have a part of Lilly and Logan inside of me.
Thank you so much, really, thank you :D
2PaintedPictureI can't tell you how beautiful this story is. In the chapters with rebecca and Lilly and Logan. I couldn't help but hate him. I cried a constant flow of tears as I felt my heart sting and writhe in pain for the loss that Lilly felt. I don't cry very often, not even in sad parts in movies (except lion king)
I feel so inspired and encouraged by your story, you have no idea how much! I love your writing and I do intend to read more from you, I hope you haven't totally forsaken fictionpress and keep posting books and stories on here. Keep the little people inspired yeah?
I did notice, a few grammatical errors here and there and some grammar parts where I got confused not knowing which word was best to use and it made me think of ms word saying 'please revise sentence'
Your character construction was something akin to magic, not only did they develop and grow, they never lost their original personality traits. Although I resonated emotionally with Lilly, the other perspectives were greatly advantageous. I loved how at one point both lilly and logan thought the exact same thing, showing their deep emotional bond and dedication, its the small things that make a story great, know what I mean?
In a little vindictive and spiteful mood I was relishing in Logans despair and got angry at him for being mad.
I just wanted to praise where its needed, its about 3 or 4 in the morning and I have to be up at about 7 to start my day, I just couldn't stop reading! I blame you for my tiredness for the on coming busy day I'll be having, but its with great satisfaction in it knowing that your story will stick with me as I read others', feeling as if I have a part of Lilly and Logan inside of me.
Thank you so much, really, thank you :D
10/20/2013 c24 4R. Ficst
I much enjoyed this story, and congratulations on the news of your Prada and Prejudice!
4R. FicstI much enjoyed this story, and congratulations on the news of your Prada and Prejudice!
4/14/2013 c23 SundayMorning73
Such a sweet story. I was frustrated at times with how everything was forgiven so easily. I wish Lilly would have made him sweat a little bit more. But that's my personal preference. Yay happy endings Haha
Such a sweet story. I was frustrated at times with how everything was forgiven so easily. I wish Lilly would have made him sweat a little bit more. But that's my personal preference. Yay happy endings Haha
1/29/2013 c9 1Shelby Rebecca
I don't think she would use the word "Dad" to describe her father. She would call him "Pa Pa," or "Father."
1Shelby RebeccaI don't think she would use the word "Dad" to describe her father. She would call him "Pa Pa," or "Father."