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12/12/2010 c10 DA-chen1
Hell yes - really intensive moment between these two lovers!

12/12/2010 c2 DA-chen1
Yeah, sweet story so far!

12/11/2010 c23 C.Turtle


good job
11/18/2010 c24 BOOK LOVER

I read your book prada and predjuce last year and loved it!

I also love this story you have written on fiction press.
8/20/2010 c23 2Abrasive
I thoroughly enjoyed this story. The writing was clear and accessible, as were the characters. There were also very few spelling/grammar mistakes.

However, at times I found it difficult to remember Lillian's blindness. Possibly you intended this, after all, she was a very strong, stubborn and independent character, which I liked about her. But I'd have preferred some more description regarding setting. Logically, as a blind person, Lillian would have relied heavily on her other senses, and although you did include reference to them, I rarely got a full sense of Lillian's perception of her surroundings. You might improve this by including more detail, for example, in the opening scene she walks into the butcher's shop - what does she smell, hear and feel when she enters? Can she smell the blood and bone, hear a heavy knife on the chopping board, feel a shift in the air from outside to inside? These details would have helped greatly to flesh things out and given a greater understanding of how Lillian dealt with her disability.

Anyway, aside from that, awesome job. :)
7/30/2010 c12 Anonymous
This story is AMAZING! I LOVE it! Your writing style reminds me of that of Jennifer Leigh (another author on this website - you should check her out!)

One thing that I've noticed though, is that you've repeated used the word "then" when making comparisons, rather than the word "than". It's a very minor mistake, but I figured you might want to know of it!

Keep up the awesome writing! And congrats on getting published! (I plan on reading your book soon!)
7/22/2010 c25 5Single White Rose
I can't wait to read your book! :) I've put it in my shopping basket now!
6/28/2010 c1 marijee
What an exciting night for Lilly to turn to tragedy. What happened to cause the bridge to fail? Reading on!
6/14/2010 c23 2ModoGirl
aww that was so cute and nicely done...i like how you worked out every detail and the plot was amazing =)
4/12/2010 c23 AndItMovesUsAll
Aw that was such a sweet ending! I really enjoyed this, it had a great plot and was a brilliant romance. I know this is random but i noticed in one of the chapters you referred to the currency shillings, but you spelt it schillings, i know this isnt extremely helpful because i dont remember what chapter it was, but it was when Lily was thinking of going somewhere, early on, and she tells us she had a couple of shillings saved up.
4/6/2010 c10 6ithinkyourgay

this story is so interesting! its getting good!

i wonder when she'll confess and when they'll be together.
4/6/2010 c2 ithinkyourgay
this story is quite interesting so far.

i wonder what is going to happen
3/27/2010 c19 grammargurl
Oh. My. Gosh. This story is so good! Logan is a first-class jerk. I love Lillian and hurt for her. Your writing talent is amazing! I bet I know why Lillian is getting sick... is she pregnant? Guess I'll go read more and find out!
3/8/2010 c1 browneyedcolly
I love how Logan has grown during the story
3/8/2010 c23 2bubublacz
Happily ever after... *Sigh* I have to tell you the truth, the end was much too fast for my liking. It was like rush work due to the narration and skipping of months whatsoever.
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