for Dawn's Reprise3/3/2005 c1 
148JJR Meerraf
i'm sorry i'm a little late... ok... i'm sorry i'm REALLY late. i'm just been neglecting FP for ever, and for that i apologize.
great poem though, Abunai, this poem is aweseome. I love the figurative style and the analogies. It's great. excellent work!
148JJR Meerrafi'm sorry i'm a little late... ok... i'm sorry i'm REALLY late. i'm just been neglecting FP for ever, and for that i apologize.
great poem though, Abunai, this poem is aweseome. I love the figurative style and the analogies. It's great. excellent work!
3/2/2005 c1 11Jez-Arinn
hm... every two lines rhyme... XDit made me read it faster after every line, expecting the rhyme at the end.
in the second line... 'ceasless' ought to be spelt 'ceaseless' if i'm not very much mistaken.
about the poem itself, it made me feel the pain.. or imagine it almost vividly...
11Jez-Arinnhm... every two lines rhyme... XDit made me read it faster after every line, expecting the rhyme at the end.
in the second line... 'ceasless' ought to be spelt 'ceaseless' if i'm not very much mistaken.
about the poem itself, it made me feel the pain.. or imagine it almost vividly...