for Drink Up5/10/2005 c1 TheCookieJar
I agree with j.b Raven. They way you formatted it made it seem like photographs of every scene and line. It was really creative how you made the wine entrance there. I absolutely love the last lines. Creative. When I write poems about sex they’re usually in spanish. It just flows better with me. I can’t seem to make poems in Enlgish as good as I do them in spanish. Isn’t that weird. I think it’s weird.
Well keep putting up poems. Maybe one about obsessions as in stalking or something. Your way with words seem to be able to describe those cynical and suggestive topics.
I agree with j.b Raven. They way you formatted it made it seem like photographs of every scene and line. It was really creative how you made the wine entrance there. I absolutely love the last lines. Creative. When I write poems about sex they’re usually in spanish. It just flows better with me. I can’t seem to make poems in Enlgish as good as I do them in spanish. Isn’t that weird. I think it’s weird.
Well keep putting up poems. Maybe one about obsessions as in stalking or something. Your way with words seem to be able to describe those cynical and suggestive topics.
5/6/2005 c1 
93the jabberjynx
This is- I'd love to have the audacity to come up with a word for it, but i don't. Its just too amazing. And the format is simply perfect. Poetry can sometimes inspire you to think in still-lifes, and isolating the words the way you do is like taking photographs of them. It's really like looking at a stained glass window, and just as beautiful. Maybe I love it so much because its just so true. Or maybe its because this is the first effective piece I've read on the subject. Perhaps its just written really, really well. Or maybe just all of the above.
93the jabberjynxThis is- I'd love to have the audacity to come up with a word for it, but i don't. Its just too amazing. And the format is simply perfect. Poetry can sometimes inspire you to think in still-lifes, and isolating the words the way you do is like taking photographs of them. It's really like looking at a stained glass window, and just as beautiful. Maybe I love it so much because its just so true. Or maybe its because this is the first effective piece I've read on the subject. Perhaps its just written really, really well. Or maybe just all of the above.
5/5/2005 c1 26BestSkeptic
So, you are not only well-minded but also have a vast amount of talent in the "writing" department. Congrats, you get a good review from me. (Most of my reviews to the trashy "authors" who clutter fictionpress.com include, "You can't handle rhyming," "Your poem makes me want to slit my wrists," and "Is this your diary?")
26BestSkepticSo, you are not only well-minded but also have a vast amount of talent in the "writing" department. Congrats, you get a good review from me. (Most of my reviews to the trashy "authors" who clutter fictionpress.com include, "You can't handle rhyming," "Your poem makes me want to slit my wrists," and "Is this your diary?")
3/26/2005 c1 14emma reven
hi assholewhat the hell is your problem? i tried to im but your stupid ass wasn't online. You know the review you gave me was in no way about the poem. My poem was not bad because i got other reviews saying they really liked it. So really what the hell is your problem? and you know what maybe my poetry does suck but it can't be any worse than yours. and please don't bother reviewing me anymore because i really don't need your stupidity and inability to contain yourself from being a complete moron. so please don't be jealous that i can write and all you can do is be a stupid asshole:)
14emma revenhi assholewhat the hell is your problem? i tried to im but your stupid ass wasn't online. You know the review you gave me was in no way about the poem. My poem was not bad because i got other reviews saying they really liked it. So really what the hell is your problem? and you know what maybe my poetry does suck but it can't be any worse than yours. and please don't bother reviewing me anymore because i really don't need your stupidity and inability to contain yourself from being a complete moron. so please don't be jealous that i can write and all you can do is be a stupid asshole:)
3/24/2005 c1 His Only
Wow. Kinda freaky... but it was nicely written. I never really read a poem like it before. It was interesting. Great job!
Wow. Kinda freaky... but it was nicely written. I never really read a poem like it before. It was interesting. Great job!
3/13/2005 c1 Pogona
Not a huge fan of poetry but I like this. It fit in well with the sharp, irrational, yet direct thoughts one has when they're inebriated and how focused they can be on something when they want it.
The style is very disjointed and that's why it works.
Not a huge fan of poetry but I like this. It fit in well with the sharp, irrational, yet direct thoughts one has when they're inebriated and how focused they can be on something when they want it.
The style is very disjointed and that's why it works.
3/12/2005 c1 Clap Clap Raise Your Hands
Different to anyhting I've read for ages, very well done, nice use of structure and repetiton, I like the last 7 lines most, very clever x weasel within x
Different to anyhting I've read for ages, very well done, nice use of structure and repetiton, I like the last 7 lines most, very clever x weasel within x
3/6/2005 c1 16Cinera
I can never understand for the love of God why you consider yourslef a bad writer. That was classic poetry. That's what gets people published. It's so simple, that it's beauty.
16CineraI can never understand for the love of God why you consider yourslef a bad writer. That was classic poetry. That's what gets people published. It's so simple, that it's beauty.
2/24/2005 c1 Little Couch
I like it. It's not my favorite, but it's still sex. I like how you bring the wine in. Gah, you make me sick with envy. And this review sucks, forgive me?
I like it. It's not my favorite, but it's still sex. I like how you bring the wine in. Gah, you make me sick with envy. And this review sucks, forgive me?
2/24/2005 c1 Pyro
*poke* Moo slurp
*poke* Moo slurp