for A Fallens Heart11/14/2007 c8 
2musephoenix
Wow, very impressive chapter! I read from chapter one till chapter 8 all in one go =]!
A very nice last line too.
2musephoenixWow, very impressive chapter! I read from chapter one till chapter 8 all in one go =]!
A very nice last line too.
8/1/2007 c8 6Carmel March
Wow, this chapter was fantastic! I like the way you use subtle details to enhance the narration. It makes for a really nice, visual read.
Update soon!
~carm~
6Carmel MarchWow, this chapter was fantastic! I like the way you use subtle details to enhance the narration. It makes for a really nice, visual read.
Update soon!
~carm~
7/31/2007 c8 28invizygirl
“Like a believe love, friendship, and the unknown can kill someone.” very interesting thought. i like it. excellent chapter.
28invizygirl“Like a believe love, friendship, and the unknown can kill someone.” very interesting thought. i like it. excellent chapter.
7/30/2007 c7 6Carmel March
This is a great story so far! You've got wonderful characters, a creative plot, and an excellent style of writing :) Good job on this, and I can't wait for more!
~carm~
6Carmel MarchThis is a great story so far! You've got wonderful characters, a creative plot, and an excellent style of writing :) Good job on this, and I can't wait for more!
~carm~
7/27/2007 c7 28invizygirl
wow this is an incredible story. i really like the plot line. its intriguing. havent seen a story like it. excellent.
28invizygirlwow this is an incredible story. i really like the plot line. its intriguing. havent seen a story like it. excellent.
7/27/2007 c2 invizygirl
i like this story a lot so far. its unlike anything i've ever read. excellent.
i like this story a lot so far. its unlike anything i've ever read. excellent.
7/15/2007 c1 5Chrys 'Phoenix' McMann
hi
if you want ... i could be your BETA reader for future chapters
a BETA reader is someone who corects spelling and checks the story over if the writer is not confident
messege me back at with your answer
i would be glad to do it
5Chrys 'Phoenix' McMannhi
if you want ... i could be your BETA reader for future chapters
a BETA reader is someone who corects spelling and checks the story over if the writer is not confident
messege me back at with your answer
i would be glad to do it
6/1/2005 c3 23MexicanGirl
good chapter its short but good also a but confusing but anway good work update soon
23MexicanGirlgood chapter its short but good also a but confusing but anway good work update soon
5/25/2005 c2 MexicanGirl
wo! awesome! update soon i wanna find out what happens. it would be so cool to mind read. creepy guy in the bushes i would have ran the hell out of there lol ok well bi
wo! awesome! update soon i wanna find out what happens. it would be so cool to mind read. creepy guy in the bushes i would have ran the hell out of there lol ok well bi
5/25/2005 c1 MexicanGirl
great chapter. i like yasuo few spelling mistakes but thats ok no ones perfect
great chapter. i like yasuo few spelling mistakes but thats ok no ones perfect