
7/13/2005 c1
1A. Tieman
That was really touching. I liked it a whole lot. There was only one part that I thought the wording was weird, but, besides that, excellent. Good job.

That was really touching. I liked it a whole lot. There was only one part that I thought the wording was weird, but, besides that, excellent. Good job.
5/22/2005 c1
14method acting
O, dark ending. You could have made it deeper, and I think I would have liked it more, but I love the raw truth to this. Nice job.

O, dark ending. You could have made it deeper, and I think I would have liked it more, but I love the raw truth to this. Nice job.
4/2/2005 c1
89Armas Apple
*sigh* I hate when ppl break others hearts, it happens so often. Broken promises... Nice job! Everyone can relate!

*sigh* I hate when ppl break others hearts, it happens so often. Broken promises... Nice job! Everyone can relate!
3/19/2005 c1
36Lunar suicide
Very good.I enjoy the lack of hate, but the feeling in know and lost. Wonderful.

Very good.I enjoy the lack of hate, but the feeling in know and lost. Wonderful.
3/14/2005 c1 breezy nostrils
You should read "Pathetic Poker Face," it's something to this extent, but it's much more evil...lol
Great job on this...I have definitely felt the same way. Keep on going!
You should read "Pathetic Poker Face," it's something to this extent, but it's much more evil...lol
Great job on this...I have definitely felt the same way. Keep on going!
3/3/2005 c1
2loves philosophy
I thought it was so captivating, it actually made me kind of sad that someone felt those emotions...it was great writting.

I thought it was so captivating, it actually made me kind of sad that someone felt those emotions...it was great writting.
3/3/2005 c1
132mizu no kokoro
aw.. it stared out nice and sweet and then it got angry~~^^
although, well placed anger~~ Good job~
keep writing!

aw.. it stared out nice and sweet and then it got angry~~^^
although, well placed anger~~ Good job~
keep writing!
3/3/2005 c1 kayttea
ello! this is really good. i especially like the begining when you say that he held your heart in his hands and you thought he'd be careful. great imagry, very creative there. well i'll talk to you later! keep on writing! (soon. it will be spring break. soon...)
:P ttfn! ! ! !
-kay
ello! this is really good. i especially like the begining when you say that he held your heart in his hands and you thought he'd be careful. great imagry, very creative there. well i'll talk to you later! keep on writing! (soon. it will be spring break. soon...)
:P ttfn! ! ! !
-kay