for Secrets and Scars1/14/2014 c1 kat-a-tat-tat
I really like this story and the character of Jess is very well-written and three dimensional and the dialogue is believable :)
However, some of the characters are pretty flat and Tyler especially seems a little bit too good to be true. His girlfriend (stupid, blonde, and mean) is a little bit of a cliche-if this is a ever edited, maybe give her some more believable dialogue/traits?
-Kat
I really like this story and the character of Jess is very well-written and three dimensional and the dialogue is believable :)
However, some of the characters are pretty flat and Tyler especially seems a little bit too good to be true. His girlfriend (stupid, blonde, and mean) is a little bit of a cliche-if this is a ever edited, maybe give her some more believable dialogue/traits?
-Kat
1/10/2014 c19 
3soulless librarian
I've read every chapter and this is a great, great story. I definitely love it. One of my new faves!
3soulless librarianI've read every chapter and this is a great, great story. I definitely love it. One of my new faves!
1/9/2014 c6 soulless librarian
"I never had o" "personalities just class" "you right that one too" are mistakes. Your a/n at the bottom of the page has mistakes too. :) As for the story, it's nice. It's escalating a bit too quickly for me, and I think our precious narrator is reading Ty and Rachel too quickly and she has no flaws, not counting trust issues and a bad home enviorment, but those don't exactly count. I still enjoyed the chapter. :) I'm never bored with your story-telling.
"I never had o" "personalities just class" "you right that one too" are mistakes. Your a/n at the bottom of the page has mistakes too. :) As for the story, it's nice. It's escalating a bit too quickly for me, and I think our precious narrator is reading Ty and Rachel too quickly and she has no flaws, not counting trust issues and a bad home enviorment, but those don't exactly count. I still enjoyed the chapter. :) I'm never bored with your story-telling.
1/9/2014 c3 soulless librarian
It should be "hear ty driving away" not "here ty driving away" and very good. The "Never show weakness" parts are... odd? I don't know how to describe it, but it just seems [[insert fitting word]] to just put that in there. Maybe it's just me?
It should be "hear ty driving away" not "here ty driving away" and very good. The "Never show weakness" parts are... odd? I don't know how to describe it, but it just seems [[insert fitting word]] to just put that in there. Maybe it's just me?
1/9/2014 c1 soulless librarian
A spelling mistake (IT should weakness was placed instead of "It showed weakness") I love the style. It's not too descriptive but not too everything-else, if you know what I mean. :)
A spelling mistake (IT should weakness was placed instead of "It showed weakness") I love the style. It's not too descriptive but not too everything-else, if you know what I mean. :)
9/15/2013 c5 11The Undecisive Thinker
I'm reading through pretty much all of your stories. I adores TRS and I liked the sequel even better. Even if you did kill Colmen.
I also really enjoy this story :3 Side note-yellow roses represent jealousy, not undying love. But I could be wrong :p
11The Undecisive ThinkerI'm reading through pretty much all of your stories. I adores TRS and I liked the sequel even better. Even if you did kill Colmen.
I also really enjoy this story :3 Side note-yellow roses represent jealousy, not undying love. But I could be wrong :p
1/16/2013 c19 D
I didn't know getting charged for battery, child abuse, and all that only added 10 years... Would thought 25 yrs (Apperetnly one Canadian lifetime...-.-)
I do believe we live longer than that xD
I didn't know getting charged for battery, child abuse, and all that only added 10 years... Would thought 25 yrs (Apperetnly one Canadian lifetime...-.-)
I do believe we live longer than that xD
11/14/2012 c19 Mika
I said this before, but,
I FREAKING LOVE YOUR STORIES!
They should make this into a movie or something! But then again, they always leave stuff out in movies...
WHO CARES?! You could publish it!
Keep on writing!
I said this before, but,
I FREAKING LOVE YOUR STORIES!
They should make this into a movie or something! But then again, they always leave stuff out in movies...
WHO CARES?! You could publish it!
Keep on writing!
11/14/2012 c4 Mika
O.O
I LOVE YOUR STORIES!
I finished reading TRS and I'm reading Bright Star, so I looked at your other stories!
I LOVE THEM ALL!
Keep on writing! ;)
O.O
I LOVE YOUR STORIES!
I finished reading TRS and I'm reading Bright Star, so I looked at your other stories!
I LOVE THEM ALL!
Keep on writing! ;)
1/14/2011 c4 roseflower
your story is realy great
your story is realy great
8/24/2010 c19 Ngoc1231
This was a good story. A bit too emotional and crazy for me, but I still enjoyed it until the end.
And I don't know how this is K+ but eh, I've seen worse ratings. I personally would have thought this would have been at least a T.
I am happy that she is free, and it is quite sad that he is only going to be in prison for only 10 years.
I enjoyed the story!
~*~Ngoc1231~*~
This was a good story. A bit too emotional and crazy for me, but I still enjoyed it until the end.
And I don't know how this is K+ but eh, I've seen worse ratings. I personally would have thought this would have been at least a T.
I am happy that she is free, and it is quite sad that he is only going to be in prison for only 10 years.
I enjoyed the story!
~*~Ngoc1231~*~
5/29/2009 c19 queenehlana
AW! That was so cute! :D I hope Jessie stay together in the sequel which I must now read!
Queen Ehlana
AW! That was so cute! :D I hope Jessie stay together in the sequel which I must now read!
Queen Ehlana
4/20/2009 c1 rach
lol! loving it already!
my name is rachel too... except that im not half the bitch that she is. well, i hope not!
great chap
lol! loving it already!
my name is rachel too... except that im not half the bitch that she is. well, i hope not!
great chap