for Gone for now7/31/2005 c1 
87youzi
the ending line really caught my eye.. liked how you built this piece up. keep writing =D
87youzithe ending line really caught my eye.. liked how you built this piece up. keep writing =D
5/12/2005 c1 ode to a firefly
I'm feeling pretty much the same way. I'm fed up with school, teachers, and half of my friends. I just would like to sit at home all alone playing guitar for about 5 days. Maybe then return to "real life."
Overall, this is a great poem with good description. :)
~TPC~
I'm feeling pretty much the same way. I'm fed up with school, teachers, and half of my friends. I just would like to sit at home all alone playing guitar for about 5 days. Maybe then return to "real life."
Overall, this is a great poem with good description. :)
~TPC~
4/23/2005 c1 8Kaywyn
you seem to know right where to repeat in this one...very very nice...and I forgot to say in nights and hallways I like the emphisis with the "and blood trickled..." just wanted top let you know that...
8Kaywynyou seem to know right where to repeat in this one...very very nice...and I forgot to say in nights and hallways I like the emphisis with the "and blood trickled..." just wanted top let you know that...
4/12/2005 c1 132mizu no kokoro
aw... life is but one big adventure isn't it?^^ cute poem~~
keep writing!
132mizu no kokoroaw... life is but one big adventure isn't it?^^ cute poem~~
keep writing!