for Suddenly Slowly11/10/2005 c5 
26invisible.writer
First of all - the band you picked is pretty much awesome, so kudos to you. Glad you liked My Life In One Sentence - but more about your chapter:) I really like the way this is progressing, and I like the flashbacks (I might have mentioned that earlier, but its always good to reiterate). Having Halleys fiancè be an ER doctor is perfect - it just seems to suite her opposite in some way - more like in the way that hes too perfect. Looking forward to more!
26invisible.writerFirst of all - the band you picked is pretty much awesome, so kudos to you. Glad you liked My Life In One Sentence - but more about your chapter:) I really like the way this is progressing, and I like the flashbacks (I might have mentioned that earlier, but its always good to reiterate). Having Halleys fiancè be an ER doctor is perfect - it just seems to suite her opposite in some way - more like in the way that hes too perfect. Looking forward to more!
11/10/2005 c5 1DuchessYappingDog
This is pretty good. I wonder what had happened. I guess it had something to do with that song. I didn't really get what the song was about. It was pretty vague. I'm pretty sure the way I'm interpretting it isn't what the song is really about... at least what the whole of it is about. Anways, I can't wait for you to update.
1DuchessYappingDogThis is pretty good. I wonder what had happened. I guess it had something to do with that song. I didn't really get what the song was about. It was pretty vague. I'm pretty sure the way I'm interpretting it isn't what the song is really about... at least what the whole of it is about. Anways, I can't wait for you to update.
11/10/2005 c5 AznCarmii
great story, hope you update soon.
great story, hope you update soon.
11/10/2005 c5 lady scribe of avandell
whoa, that was emotional. and fascinating. i'm having trouble getting my head around it. lol.
i noticed a lot fewer mistakes this time. you're getting better. :) can't wait for the next chapter! sere mi eru...lsoa
whoa, that was emotional. and fascinating. i'm having trouble getting my head around it. lol.
i noticed a lot fewer mistakes this time. you're getting better. :) can't wait for the next chapter! sere mi eru...lsoa
11/10/2005 c5 4bringmayflowers
Holy crap. This is like THE best story I have found recently on fiction press. I am NOT kidding.
You are a master. I love the flashbacks. I love the interweaving songs. I love the anger.
I'd like to know more about how it went from Garrett-Halley to Gavin-Halley. Also, make your chapters longer because they're so good! More flashbacks, more flashbacks!
Also I found some typos, but I'm not gonna critisize you because we *all* have mistakes in our writing, even published authors. Believe me, I read books and when I find mistakes I get mad at editors. Haha.
Anyway update as soon as possible because I'm in love with every character. Also.. you are on my Author Alert and Favorite Story lists. Be happy. Be excited.
4bringmayflowersHoly crap. This is like THE best story I have found recently on fiction press. I am NOT kidding.
You are a master. I love the flashbacks. I love the interweaving songs. I love the anger.
I'd like to know more about how it went from Garrett-Halley to Gavin-Halley. Also, make your chapters longer because they're so good! More flashbacks, more flashbacks!
Also I found some typos, but I'm not gonna critisize you because we *all* have mistakes in our writing, even published authors. Believe me, I read books and when I find mistakes I get mad at editors. Haha.
Anyway update as soon as possible because I'm in love with every character. Also.. you are on my Author Alert and Favorite Story lists. Be happy. Be excited.
11/10/2005 c5 35pixy-dizzy
And how gorgeous is this? There aren't enough stories like this on fictionpress...we need more people like you!
I feel like frigging Uncle Sam.
Normally I really, really don't like the whole 'band' sort of plot, but you're pulling this off. There are deeper themes running through this that make this story stand out from the crowd. And few people can combine poetry and real life and make it into a story. Meh. I think I'm in love with you. haha.
Fantastic, fantastic job. Please update soon!
35pixy-dizzyAnd how gorgeous is this? There aren't enough stories like this on fictionpress...we need more people like you!
I feel like frigging Uncle Sam.
Normally I really, really don't like the whole 'band' sort of plot, but you're pulling this off. There are deeper themes running through this that make this story stand out from the crowd. And few people can combine poetry and real life and make it into a story. Meh. I think I'm in love with you. haha.
Fantastic, fantastic job. Please update soon!
11/10/2005 c5 happyeverafter
It's a rally good story. I'm sorry this is kind of unoriginal, but I thought that I at least would let you know that I read this story.
It's a rally good story. I'm sorry this is kind of unoriginal, but I thought that I at least would let you know that I read this story.
11/8/2005 c4 lady scribe of avandell
lol... loyalty is important.
you did better on the tenses this time, but i did notice a couple of weird things like "I held in my gasped." i think you meant "gasp" lol. just watch for that sort of thing. i recommend you use grammar check if you've got it on your word processor. but be careful if you do! sometimes, your sentences will be fine and the thing will say they're wrong.
this was a good chapter. can't wait to read more! sere mi eru...lsoa
lol... loyalty is important.
you did better on the tenses this time, but i did notice a couple of weird things like "I held in my gasped." i think you meant "gasp" lol. just watch for that sort of thing. i recommend you use grammar check if you've got it on your word processor. but be careful if you do! sometimes, your sentences will be fine and the thing will say they're wrong.
this was a good chapter. can't wait to read more! sere mi eru...lsoa
11/8/2005 c4 18pinkfluffyoranges
This story is really good, but i must say that changing from past to present is a bit confusing. and your leaving so much in the dark that its getting frustrating. I read a stroy liek this not long ago and it drove me insane near the end. but i have to say it was the best storyi ever read on fiction press so maybe thats a good thing
18pinkfluffyorangesThis story is really good, but i must say that changing from past to present is a bit confusing. and your leaving so much in the dark that its getting frustrating. I read a stroy liek this not long ago and it drove me insane near the end. but i have to say it was the best storyi ever read on fiction press so maybe thats a good thing
11/6/2005 c4 26invisible.writer
You know when you read something so riveting that all you can do is sit back and think 'Wow'. Yeah, that's what I'm doing. This story is amazing. The way your chapters are written are straight to the point - no more, no less. Your words are straight on the mark. Halley and Gavin are as real as they'll ever be. I will definitely be awaiting more.
26invisible.writerYou know when you read something so riveting that all you can do is sit back and think 'Wow'. Yeah, that's what I'm doing. This story is amazing. The way your chapters are written are straight to the point - no more, no less. Your words are straight on the mark. Halley and Gavin are as real as they'll ever be. I will definitely be awaiting more.
11/6/2005 c3 10i found nemo
your story is SO good so far. i forgot to say in the last review that you deserve SO MANY more reviews than you have right now. we need to spread the word about suddenly slowly!
10i found nemoyour story is SO good so far. i forgot to say in the last review that you deserve SO MANY more reviews than you have right now. we need to spread the word about suddenly slowly!
11/6/2005 c4 i found nemo
oh my god. your story is only 3 chapters and a prologue so far, but already i am...obsessed, it that's the word. you have a really captivating writing style that i really wish i possessed.
i'm just amazed. really, i am.
keep up the great work and please please PLEASE update soon!
oh my god. your story is only 3 chapters and a prologue so far, but already i am...obsessed, it that's the word. you have a really captivating writing style that i really wish i possessed.
i'm just amazed. really, i am.
keep up the great work and please please PLEASE update soon!