
11/6/2005 c3 lady scribe of avandell
you're keeping me interested, but i wanted to say: watch your verb tenses, you were jumping from past to present all over the place and it got kinda confusing. other than that, yeah, keep it coming (hopefully sooner rather than later). i'll be reading it. sere mi eru...lsoa
you're keeping me interested, but i wanted to say: watch your verb tenses, you were jumping from past to present all over the place and it got kinda confusing. other than that, yeah, keep it coming (hopefully sooner rather than later). i'll be reading it. sere mi eru...lsoa
7/20/2005 c2
12Little Mermaid
o interesting...i wonder what'll happen btw i love how it flashes back and stuff...those are always fun to read
update asap

o interesting...i wonder what'll happen btw i love how it flashes back and stuff...those are always fun to read
update asap
5/9/2005 c2 Dear
Finally. Oh, that made me so happy. I love your story, you know, even though it's only like 2 chapters it's still great. You're a wonderful writer. Can't wait for the next part.
Finally. Oh, that made me so happy. I love your story, you know, even though it's only like 2 chapters it's still great. You're a wonderful writer. Can't wait for the next part.
5/5/2005 c2 lady scribe of avandell
ooh! total envisioning of a jim morrison-esque duo (only not quite as totally awesome). and i want to know what's getting started. this is so cool! keep it coming! sere mi eru...lsoa
ooh! total envisioning of a jim morrison-esque duo (only not quite as totally awesome). and i want to know what's getting started. this is so cool! keep it coming! sere mi eru...lsoa
5/4/2005 c2 Phoenyx
Very cute. Update it soon. :)
Very cute. Update it soon. :)
5/4/2005 c2 FrozenWaterFaerie
I like it a lot. Anyways, are you only putting it in past tense or are you going to have the present thing too?
I like it a lot. Anyways, are you only putting it in past tense or are you going to have the present thing too?
3/27/2005 c1 Dear
I like this story alot. I'll glady await the next one, if there is one? Great job so far, I really like it.
I like this story alot. I'll glady await the next one, if there is one? Great job so far, I really like it.
3/16/2005 c1 lady scribe of avandell
ooh! a cool start. if it's a start, that is. it doesn't seem like a one-shot. i like it. the characters seem to have a rich back-story and it makes me want to read more! and i LOVE that you used "help"! it's one of my favorite beatles songs!
i want to read more of this if you've got it! sere mi eru...lsoa
ooh! a cool start. if it's a start, that is. it doesn't seem like a one-shot. i like it. the characters seem to have a rich back-story and it makes me want to read more! and i LOVE that you used "help"! it's one of my favorite beatles songs!
i want to read more of this if you've got it! sere mi eru...lsoa