for Winters Rain7/2/2005 c1 
79INTP
That's an interesting and fitting metaphor you used to describe the deluge of negative emotions that we are bombarded with. The italics drew attention to the important words, especially "drowned," that line seems very important. The pacing is also done very well, it's slow but continuous and almost pounding, like the rain/emotions you're describing; I love the way you tied it in to the content of the poem.
79INTPThat's an interesting and fitting metaphor you used to describe the deluge of negative emotions that we are bombarded with. The italics drew attention to the important words, especially "drowned," that line seems very important. The pacing is also done very well, it's slow but continuous and almost pounding, like the rain/emotions you're describing; I love the way you tied it in to the content of the poem.
6/3/2005 c2 22blackoutroses
liked the line:"Happiness is put on hold for the moment"the end also worked well-it summates the poem. You've talked about a complex issue in metaphorical terms and it sounds great!
22blackoutrosesliked the line:"Happiness is put on hold for the moment"the end also worked well-it summates the poem. You've talked about a complex issue in metaphorical terms and it sounds great!
4/16/2005 c2 Galadh Niniel
Both are really beautiful, I love the combination and interweaving of nature and emotions. I find this so true, I usually see nature tinted by the feelings that are in me at that moment, and the same landscape can make me happy or melanchloy depending on the mood I'm in and the things I associate it with. I like the first poem slightly better becuase the feelings are more intense there, there is more "happening" emotionally if you know what I mean. But both are good.
Both are really beautiful, I love the combination and interweaving of nature and emotions. I find this so true, I usually see nature tinted by the feelings that are in me at that moment, and the same landscape can make me happy or melanchloy depending on the mood I'm in and the things I associate it with. I like the first poem slightly better becuase the feelings are more intense there, there is more "happening" emotionally if you know what I mean. But both are good.
3/23/2005 c1 113fRoZeN tIgEr TeArS
very beautiful trisha.keep on writing, and im always here to listen. if ya need to vent, youve got my email.
always*self desfense cheerleader* -LOL-
113fRoZeN tIgEr TeArSvery beautiful trisha.keep on writing, and im always here to listen. if ya need to vent, youve got my email.
always*self desfense cheerleader* -LOL-