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7/24/2005 c1 the naked civil servant
oh... i really really like this. what is it with tangerines? they are inspiring."her tangerine facechambered and brusingreflects tease-peeled pieces of puddled fleshsectionedand dripping with time"
5/31/2005 c1 36Amrun
I really love this poem. The imagery is so beautiful, and I can feel the sad detachment in the words.

under the moon, she appears only as a nympth, a fairy

It's "nymph," not "nympth." Just thought I'd say that. :]
5/30/2005 c1 13evm
aww, it's so sad and gorgeous. 'hopelessly stuck, uneven together' (love)
4/9/2005 c1 95beti213
the imagery here is really great... the last line is a bit confusing, although that's probably a joke between you or something (I just caught myself mentioning things only I understand in a poem... it was rather pathetic) anyway, I like it a lot :)
4/1/2005 c1 175The Random Witness
WOW! YOU MUST HAVE HEARD THIS SO MANY TIMES BUT IVE GOT TO SAY TOO, THAT YOUR POEMS ARE ALL SO POWERFUL AND HEARETFELT! the imagery is amazing and the style unique! Be proud coz this is great! ~TRW
3/30/2005 c1 catseyeview
like it!
3/25/2005 c1 62lifescrewsusall
i like your poems because they are different from what i usually read on fiction press. they are complex and descriptive but still personal. "and the boy that fared her well a long time ago, before there was a heaven or a hell he had hair like midnight his skin was wallpaper white but she isn't doing well herself, not quite"it's real poetry & i like it :)-Aaron
3/23/2005 c1 84Escapist
-My favorite by you. Ever. I'm kicking something out of my favorite stories to add this.
3/22/2005 c1 crazy dog events
in a way this poem reminds me alot about me. It's nice when i come across sometihng i can relate to. Alot of things on fictionpress are either crap or beautiful, and never can i find a happy medium of relation.
3/21/2005 c1 102Joewhatever
*claps* Very nice, I like it. I really dig the title too, I don't know why, but I just do.
3/21/2005 c1 158outruntheavalanche
[he had hair like midnight

his skin was wallpaper white]

i loved the whole thing, obviously, but those lines really stood out to me. i also liked how you used the word 'mismangled'.

i really liked this.
3/20/2005 c1 24Sarah-Brighteyes
Beautiful and such a sweet tale. I loved the way it was woven in the poem. I hope your friend enjoyed the poem you wrote for her. It was beautiful. The imagery was just...wow. Beautiful. Good piece.
3/20/2005 c1 Made in U.S.A
great descriptions and it flows together well and its just beautiful again and everything. keep writing :D
3/20/2005 c1 33shola
Funny. That sounds an awful lot like a friend of mine, just from his perspective, not mine. Interesting.Really great descriptions and again comparisons in your own inimitable style. quality
3/20/2005 c1 1k+asyousaid
As always, beautiful! Need I say more? Each line is a masterpiece.
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