3/22/2005 c1 85grim-dreamer
Well, I certainly thought that a good story with a happy ending. The way you raised and lowered the tone during the poem was very well done and the pace was just right. Something quite charming about it too. Nice one.
Well, I certainly thought that a good story with a happy ending. The way you raised and lowered the tone during the poem was very well done and the pace was just right. Something quite charming about it too. Nice one.
3/21/2005 c1 24Sarah-Brighteyes
Interesting little piece. Sort of a thinking piece. Its like when you dont have your morals in check and start becoming too suspicious, life backs itself over you and you get smooshed. I liked this little parable sort of poem. It had the right amount of humor. Great job.
Interesting little piece. Sort of a thinking piece. Its like when you dont have your morals in check and start becoming too suspicious, life backs itself over you and you get smooshed. I liked this little parable sort of poem. It had the right amount of humor. Great job.
3/20/2005 c1 242LauraKM
Brilliant, love it, i've tried a few things along similar lines, but i like yours more. very clever and funny, made me smile.
Brilliant, love it, i've tried a few things along similar lines, but i like yours more. very clever and funny, made me smile.
3/20/2005 c1 17TrueToMyself
Um...interesting? Kind of unexpected ending caught me by surprise (as it probably was supposed to do...). Keep writing!
~TrueToMyself
Um...interesting? Kind of unexpected ending caught me by surprise (as it probably was supposed to do...). Keep writing!
~TrueToMyself