11/5/2005 c8 Gabrielle
It is all making more sence now. I love the names you gave everybody. When are you going to write more? I think you are doing good. Write more soon.
It is all making more sence now. I love the names you gave everybody. When are you going to write more? I think you are doing good. Write more soon.
11/3/2005 c4 Gabrielle
This chapter was good but, I am still kind of confused. Maybe it is just me. I think Lave and Kael became friends to fast. Like thier wasn't much questioning going on. I think they trusted eachother to fast. Like how didn't she know he might still be bad. Well maybe I should just read it all in the same day. It might make more sence then.
This chapter was good but, I am still kind of confused. Maybe it is just me. I think Lave and Kael became friends to fast. Like thier wasn't much questioning going on. I think they trusted eachother to fast. Like how didn't she know he might still be bad. Well maybe I should just read it all in the same day. It might make more sence then.
11/1/2005 c2 Gabrielle
How do you pronounce Hebst? Also I was a little confused about the second chapter being a flash back. I knew it was when you said it was. But I didn't know that when I first read it.
How do you pronounce Hebst? Also I was a little confused about the second chapter being a flash back. I knew it was when you said it was. But I didn't know that when I first read it.
10/31/2005 c1 Gabrielle
I thought you did a great job. I want to read more,so when ever you can send it that would be great. sorry it took me so long to read I forgot that I had it. Write more soon. TTYL
I thought you did a great job. I want to read more,so when ever you can send it that would be great. sorry it took me so long to read I forgot that I had it. Write more soon. TTYL
8/25/2005 c8 11EldestMushroom
yay! me likey. could use some work though. Lave shouldnt be able to see what the snake and dog are doing when she's evesdropping. but thats it. yay!
yay! me likey. could use some work though. Lave shouldnt be able to see what the snake and dog are doing when she's evesdropping. but thats it. yay!
8/7/2005 c7 spag
all this time and STILL no update. naughty bri!
all this time and STILL no update. naughty bri!
6/30/2005 c7 1innocent-curiousity
I love your story so far, it's very intriguing. I hope you cotinue to write and if you do I'll continue to review. Not that I'm begging but could you possiblly review my story as well, only if you want to.
I love your story so far, it's very intriguing. I hope you cotinue to write and if you do I'll continue to review. Not that I'm begging but could you possiblly review my story as well, only if you want to.
6/30/2005 c7 whoever i am im not spazz
you go work on that chapter 8 and stop insulting me
you go work on that chapter 8 and stop insulting me
6/29/2005 c1 7firefairy27
Hm, interesting, very interesting. I would suggest, however, separating what your characters are saying from the rest of the writing a little bit more, and pronouns are a blessing, so try to use them a bit more often. Other than that-great story, keep up the good work.
Hm, interesting, very interesting. I would suggest, however, separating what your characters are saying from the rest of the writing a little bit more, and pronouns are a blessing, so try to use them a bit more often. Other than that-great story, keep up the good work.
6/29/2005 c7 EldestMushroom
the ch. itself was good but i wish you hadnt used such cliche animals. someone should have a frog familiar once in a while. thats it. im gonna be the one to do it. have a frog familiar in my story that is...or a squirrel
the ch. itself was good but i wish you hadnt used such cliche animals. someone should have a frog familiar once in a while. thats it. im gonna be the one to do it. have a frog familiar in my story that is...or a squirrel
6/25/2005 c6 spags
bri! you better update NOW or I'll...um...do something horrible! ( and you know i will)
bri! you better update NOW or I'll...um...do something horrible! ( and you know i will)
5/3/2005 c6 11EldestMushroom
Hey, i've reveiwed how many times and I didnt get a shoutout! Im depressed...VERY depressed. hmph. oh well. the only thing is that you give us new information a bit too quickly. other than that, it was really good. it's kinda weird how Kael is her grandfather (yeah! he's not another touchstone! but he was a father at 17...eww...)keep that chapters coming and tell your knee to start walking again...that didn't make any sense at all did it...
Hey, i've reveiwed how many times and I didnt get a shoutout! Im depressed...VERY depressed. hmph. oh well. the only thing is that you give us new information a bit too quickly. other than that, it was really good. it's kinda weird how Kael is her grandfather (yeah! he's not another touchstone! but he was a father at 17...eww...)keep that chapters coming and tell your knee to start walking again...that didn't make any sense at all did it...
4/26/2005 c1 4Odori-ri
wonderful. I've just read the first chapter and I love it. Did you write on fanfiction? If so, what for? I'd love to read them.
P.S, I'm a new authoress here. Would u please R&R my story? I'd love 2 hear what you think
Supernaturalist, out
wonderful. I've just read the first chapter and I love it. Did you write on fanfiction? If so, what for? I'd love to read them.
P.S, I'm a new authoress here. Would u please R&R my story? I'd love 2 hear what you think
Supernaturalist, out
4/24/2005 c4 laurenzo
awesome as usual
awesome as usual