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3/29/2005 c1 btfdweller
ok so I am too loazy to sign in and to review the last chapters of your other story. I did read them, and I highly enjoyed them...

This story-It is a decent start; you seem to have strength in creating characters. I think the bottom half of the story caught my attention more than the top. The whole elevator thing is hilarious. Alot of the paragraphs began with 'I' or 'I'd', etc back to back; and that gave it a repetitive feel. That is the only crticism I have.

Great use of italics! That really livened up the story and gave it more humor.
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