for Fireworks6/4/2007 c3 
28Erisah Mae
Creepy, but well constructed. Enough twists so that it keeps you guessing, but the scariest part is that it is the person who starts out making the most sense who turns out mad.
Shame you never finished this.
Erisah
28Erisah MaeCreepy, but well constructed. Enough twists so that it keeps you guessing, but the scariest part is that it is the person who starts out making the most sense who turns out mad.
Shame you never finished this.
Erisah
4/5/2005 c3 1Pockymon
Hm...Not bad. My main complaint is that I sort of want them to be more concise. Sometimes their pieces remind me of those lengthy soliloquies about life, death and the universe, but it being read on a screen and what with me trying to imagine this on stage, it feels just a little *too* drunken. ^_^ But heck, to each his own.A misspelling here and there, but overall, nice!
1PockymonHm...Not bad. My main complaint is that I sort of want them to be more concise. Sometimes their pieces remind me of those lengthy soliloquies about life, death and the universe, but it being read on a screen and what with me trying to imagine this on stage, it feels just a little *too* drunken. ^_^ But heck, to each his own.A misspelling here and there, but overall, nice!
4/2/2005 c2 7Lee Harvey Kennedy
Well, I certainly didn't see that one coming. I liked Victor's monologue, although I don't quite understand what makes him come out of the house at the end for Mark. I know why he does it, Mark is still his friend and he doesn't want to sink to the level he detests so much in him, but what makes him do it? Perhaps if he pauses on the porch and we can see the inner torment shaking his body or something of the like, it would give more of a visible reason as to why he retrieves his friend. Otherwise, this was very, very good, extremely compelling and very well written. Good job.
7Lee Harvey KennedyWell, I certainly didn't see that one coming. I liked Victor's monologue, although I don't quite understand what makes him come out of the house at the end for Mark. I know why he does it, Mark is still his friend and he doesn't want to sink to the level he detests so much in him, but what makes him do it? Perhaps if he pauses on the porch and we can see the inner torment shaking his body or something of the like, it would give more of a visible reason as to why he retrieves his friend. Otherwise, this was very, very good, extremely compelling and very well written. Good job.
4/2/2005 c1 Lee Harvey Kennedy
Wow. Really, wow. This is a pretty damn good script. I was a bit hung up towards the beginning with the talk about computers and the finer things in life, it seemed like it was a bit of a sledgehammer way to reveal characters when a light slap would do, but otherwise, this is very compelling, and I look forward to seeing more of it.
And yes, I did use "The Importance of Being Earnest" as a study while writing that piece. It's a very good play, I've always been a fan of it.
Wow. Really, wow. This is a pretty damn good script. I was a bit hung up towards the beginning with the talk about computers and the finer things in life, it seemed like it was a bit of a sledgehammer way to reveal characters when a light slap would do, but otherwise, this is very compelling, and I look forward to seeing more of it.
And yes, I did use "The Importance of Being Earnest" as a study while writing that piece. It's a very good play, I've always been a fan of it.