for The Doll Abysmal11/13/2006 c1 Amy
Wow, you have a brilliant imagination. The story is fascinating, and beautifully sad. I would reccomend that you re-work it sometime. The writing shows a lot of promise, but is still pretty loose. Try reading it out loud. It helps me to see what my stories sound like. Keep it up. You have a fantastic imagination.
Wow, you have a brilliant imagination. The story is fascinating, and beautifully sad. I would reccomend that you re-work it sometime. The writing shows a lot of promise, but is still pretty loose. Try reading it out loud. It helps me to see what my stories sound like. Keep it up. You have a fantastic imagination.
6/6/2005 c1 jen blaise ti
doll abysmal.. the story was fine. it was fluent and it captivates my eyes to keep reading it.. twice then thrice. it wasn't scary but more on thrilling. keep it up! make more stories! i like your stories! it's enjoyable and it makes me happy!^^
doll abysmal.. the story was fine. it was fluent and it captivates my eyes to keep reading it.. twice then thrice. it wasn't scary but more on thrilling. keep it up! make more stories! i like your stories! it's enjoyable and it makes me happy!^^
5/2/2005 c1 Ian Fulgar
Incredibly haunting. And as always, i am fondly drawn into your world, like walking into a painting. This piece echoes beyond its words. Only few stories can actually give me good goosebumps. This one surpassed the rest. You have a magnificent gift. Thank you making me a part of it.
Incredibly haunting. And as always, i am fondly drawn into your world, like walking into a painting. This piece echoes beyond its words. Only few stories can actually give me good goosebumps. This one surpassed the rest. You have a magnificent gift. Thank you making me a part of it.
4/15/2005 c1 francis
cool! its really deep and abstract but still understandable
cool! its really deep and abstract but still understandable
4/14/2005 c1 
9Celeste Se'oir
Coolie. Reminds me of a side part of a rp video game I once played, had to go around in a house of dolls and guess their names...But I digress, I think it was better to tell it from the cats view, and the fact that the girl's ghost and the doll looked similar after she died.
Later,~Ffuffy~
9Celeste Se'oirCoolie. Reminds me of a side part of a rp video game I once played, had to go around in a house of dolls and guess their names...But I digress, I think it was better to tell it from the cats view, and the fact that the girl's ghost and the doll looked similar after she died.
Later,~Ffuffy~
4/7/2005 c1 1A Chroi
Okay...sorry, I just got a little weirded out. This is good, mind you. There's an element of horror, but instead of amplifying it in an attempt to get a cheap scare, you let it remain subtle and (I believe) more effective. This had an interesting tone to it, one I thought was interesting. The voice of the doll was well-written and drew me in! There were a few grammar mistakes, but nothing major. All in all, this was a very good work. Thank you for reviewing, and keep on writing!
1A ChroiOkay...sorry, I just got a little weirded out. This is good, mind you. There's an element of horror, but instead of amplifying it in an attempt to get a cheap scare, you let it remain subtle and (I believe) more effective. This had an interesting tone to it, one I thought was interesting. The voice of the doll was well-written and drew me in! There were a few grammar mistakes, but nothing major. All in all, this was a very good work. Thank you for reviewing, and keep on writing!