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4/18/2005 c1 76CoolBeans18s
Ooh... chilling imagery!
4/13/2005 c1 8Marie Northcott
Normally I don't go for haikus... but I thought this was very nice. The flow was pretty, and the substance was mature. Nice.
4/9/2005 c1 breezy nostrils
That so described me...simple and sweet...keep on going!
4/9/2005 c1 16if sighing
A nice contrasting image. Contrasting the supposedly soothing spring rain into a cold winter-y feeling.

The second line seems a little too wordy for a haiku and I know that you're trying to keep the 5/7/5 form but it just seems wordy (for a haiku). I do belive that in haiku none of the words should be capitalized.

but it's very lovely a it feels very cold
4/8/2005 c1 6Nobody-n-Particular
I can feel it.

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