for Fade Away10/5/2007 c1 
613DiaRose
I love this poem...
I HATEHATEHATEHATEHATE that you said "u" instead of "you" though. It makes it hard to take it seriously.
Love,
~Dia
613DiaRoseI love this poem...
I HATEHATEHATEHATEHATE that you said "u" instead of "you" though. It makes it hard to take it seriously.
Love,
~Dia
3/4/2007 c1 Her Wishing Well
I like this though I think it would be better if you put 'you' instead of 'u' but other than that it was good - Thanks for the review.
I like this though I think it would be better if you put 'you' instead of 'u' but other than that it was good - Thanks for the review.
8/13/2006 c1 31Leaving Here
awesome. i like the last two lines. they put the whole poem together.
i live iowa, and nebraska is only one state away rite?
and i can't sing or play any instrument! i sux! lol
31Leaving Hereawesome. i like the last two lines. they put the whole poem together.
i live iowa, and nebraska is only one state away rite?
and i can't sing or play any instrument! i sux! lol
2/16/2006 c1 Needa S
Very nice, Great job, by adding a few more lines, this would make good song as well. Keep up the wonderful work.
Very nice, Great job, by adding a few more lines, this would make good song as well. Keep up the wonderful work.
1/13/2006 c1 59Calliope Foster
A very modern way of expression, with the shortened pronouns. Great work, as always!
59Calliope FosterA very modern way of expression, with the shortened pronouns. Great work, as always!
1/6/2006 c1 24Tr APeze-sWiNGer
I think it's good, but I think you lost something by not spelling out "you."
24Tr APeze-sWiNGerI think it's good, but I think you lost something by not spelling out "you."
11/10/2005 c1 80AbstractMind
The only thing that throws the poem off is the tenses.You switch from present tense to past tense and it doesn't work.
80AbstractMindThe only thing that throws the poem off is the tenses.You switch from present tense to past tense and it doesn't work.
11/3/2005 c1 3Broken doll on a dirty shelf
Fade away, its almost a 'kind' way of telling someone to die. Maybe it's just me, but your choice of words really brought that thought to my mind. That's not bad though, it's actually most excellent.
Harlequin~Please fix me...
3Broken doll on a dirty shelfFade away, its almost a 'kind' way of telling someone to die. Maybe it's just me, but your choice of words really brought that thought to my mind. That's not bad though, it's actually most excellent.
Harlequin~Please fix me...
10/13/2005 c1 43Patricia Louise
I like this, but why did you not spell out "you"? Not complaining, just wondering. This was great!
43Patricia LouiseI like this, but why did you not spell out "you"? Not complaining, just wondering. This was great!