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6/13/2005 c1 46inquistrix
Hey, it's been a while. How are you?

On more poetry-concerned lines, you've gotten better. Work a little on punctuation, it'll help increase...power? "I want to have such friendship but can't trust you" is slightly awkward. It's really good though, I love the questions.

6/8/2005 c1 10Moon-Child76
WOW! I'm impressed William. I like the form, it makes the whole thing more powerful. Wow! It's really good. I am severely wowed at the moment and can't think of anything to say...except that's incredible. I applaud you.~Chelle
5/12/2005 c1 81daphnegray78
I love this. Balance... somethine we all strive to find. Well done! ^_^ I'm glad to see you back and writing.

4/19/2005 c1 612simpleplan13
interesting & true
4/15/2005 c1 Brandy Bear
Well done very nice poem.and its so true Congrats on another great poem

4/15/2005 c1 10Rebecca Kelsey
ORC KING! Youve been gone so long, Ive missed your writing! If this poem is based on what you have been going through, it must be tough. Its hard to want to trust someone, yet you cant. Great poem, I hope to see more soon.
4/15/2005 c1 15Macca Lane
liethe wayour prlbme is kdinf orchestrate dby the layout an dotne in the poem
4/15/2005 c1 7swtdreamz101
o the balance between all things, if it is tipped, chaos will reign free, nice poem

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