for There Once Was a Girl6/8/2005 c3 gonnabefamous
Holy Shit! Who the hell is Karen?
Holy Shit! Who the hell is Karen?
4/27/2005 c1 
7Lola Sanchez
I like this, theres definite potential...I'm too tired to leave a detailed review, but I feel bad for Emily...at least she has Rich, right?
7Lola SanchezI like this, theres definite potential...I'm too tired to leave a detailed review, but I feel bad for Emily...at least she has Rich, right?
4/17/2005 c1 4G. H. Pedersen
? The end is a mystery to me, is the story done, or is there more hiding somewhere ? Well I think I liked the idea that is if I got the idea right. There are some very moving things in this and I think that if you work a bit with it, it would make a really great story. The most important thing, keep writing, it is one of the only ways to get better. You got the ideas and the characters, now it is time to make the language more flowing. Don't get me wrong, I liked the story, else I wouldn't have reviewed it, but I just have a feeling that you could do better. I will move on and read something else you have made! Please up-date if there is more =)
4G. H. Pedersen? The end is a mystery to me, is the story done, or is there more hiding somewhere ? Well I think I liked the idea that is if I got the idea right. There are some very moving things in this and I think that if you work a bit with it, it would make a really great story. The most important thing, keep writing, it is one of the only ways to get better. You got the ideas and the characters, now it is time to make the language more flowing. Don't get me wrong, I liked the story, else I wouldn't have reviewed it, but I just have a feeling that you could do better. I will move on and read something else you have made! Please up-date if there is more =)